for She HatedLoved Me2/20/2007 c1 Jenny Rebel
This moved me... I knew a girl like the one described here. You did a wonderful job on this.
This moved me... I knew a girl like the one described here. You did a wonderful job on this.
1/26/2007 c1 
879Moondog Dozier
This has an interesting complexity through the way that it is woven. I like the use of "I", and "she", as they really elevate the mystery beyond knowing the actual names of the individuals. This has a real mystical connection aspect to it. The specific vagueness adds alot to this, it generates the reader to thinking in various directions. Well written. MD:77.
879Moondog DozierThis has an interesting complexity through the way that it is woven. I like the use of "I", and "she", as they really elevate the mystery beyond knowing the actual names of the individuals. This has a real mystical connection aspect to it. The specific vagueness adds alot to this, it generates the reader to thinking in various directions. Well written. MD:77.
1/25/2007 c1 3Bianco Lupo
That's pretty deep. I like it. Your grammer could use a little work, but other then that it's pretty good.
3Bianco LupoThat's pretty deep. I like it. Your grammer could use a little work, but other then that it's pretty good.
1/24/2007 c1 93Venustas iaceo
I love the phrase you used "Came to dance with me in the night of the sun." You've got light and dark and what can easily be thought of as a romantic thing - dancing, so that one phrase alone just goes so nice with the love/hate thing.
93Venustas iaceoI love the phrase you used "Came to dance with me in the night of the sun." You've got light and dark and what can easily be thought of as a romantic thing - dancing, so that one phrase alone just goes so nice with the love/hate thing.
1/23/2007 c1 11Leylique Morrow
I am absolutely floored by the parallel of this situation to one of my own - only I am she, and the situation is more future than past.
I love that every detail is there, and none is said outright. You have cleverly buried the meaning of everything in wording that is... well, poetic. Straight to my favorites.
-Leila
11Leylique MorrowI am absolutely floored by the parallel of this situation to one of my own - only I am she, and the situation is more future than past.
I love that every detail is there, and none is said outright. You have cleverly buried the meaning of everything in wording that is... well, poetic. Straight to my favorites.
-Leila