for Blind Yourself4/13/2007 c5 
20TUS
Whoo! I completely forgot the title, so I was a bit confused when I found this update in my inbox...eheh. I decided I may as well check it, and I did, and yay!
Anyway...now for the on topic stuff...
E. Nice chapter. The bit where you reveal that his attacker guy (uhh...the one he asks for the cell phone) was Arthur was a bit unclear, though that's probably just me...I haven't completely woken up yet. xD) But otherwise, amazing. -dances- I believe your next chapter shall be great. Yes.
20TUSWhoo! I completely forgot the title, so I was a bit confused when I found this update in my inbox...eheh. I decided I may as well check it, and I did, and yay!
Anyway...now for the on topic stuff...
E. Nice chapter. The bit where you reveal that his attacker guy (uhh...the one he asks for the cell phone) was Arthur was a bit unclear, though that's probably just me...I haven't completely woken up yet. xD) But otherwise, amazing. -dances- I believe your next chapter shall be great. Yes.
4/10/2007 c4 73xanthofile
i went total "fingers against the lips" emo scary-movie reaction on this one. *laughs* it was just perfect, and i was almost disappointed that he got off so easily. unless someone comes to chase his ass down or something. O.o
i wish i could write something dramatically scary.
73xanthofilei went total "fingers against the lips" emo scary-movie reaction on this one. *laughs* it was just perfect, and i was almost disappointed that he got off so easily. unless someone comes to chase his ass down or something. O.o
i wish i could write something dramatically scary.
4/10/2007 c2 xanthofile
i laughed. that kid was so columbine. *and that's sick that i find that funny*
and i review because no reviews make me emo (personally), so i'll try to keep other's emo-factor at a minimum. ^^
i laughed. that kid was so columbine. *and that's sick that i find that funny*
and i review because no reviews make me emo (personally), so i'll try to keep other's emo-factor at a minimum. ^^
4/10/2007 c1 xanthofile
there is nothing so god-awful as the cloying, overwhelming, puke-stench of blood. BLOOD. but i rather like venison, so i deal with the blood and go outside to freeze to death in the cold. *laughs*
but then there was the time my dad dropped a piece of raw meat into the clean dishes side of the sink...after i had just washed them. *narrows eyes* i still hold a grudge about that.
oh, and maybe i'm a retard, but i never thought to check your profile. not once. RETARD.
there is nothing so god-awful as the cloying, overwhelming, puke-stench of blood. BLOOD. but i rather like venison, so i deal with the blood and go outside to freeze to death in the cold. *laughs*
but then there was the time my dad dropped a piece of raw meat into the clean dishes side of the sink...after i had just washed them. *narrows eyes* i still hold a grudge about that.
oh, and maybe i'm a retard, but i never thought to check your profile. not once. RETARD.
4/3/2007 c3 4SerialXLain
O.o Your AN makes it sound like you got flamed by an ignorant homophobe. Why don't the ignorant homophobes ever bother ME? ;-; Kidding. Anyway. Sorry if someone did try to spread their ignorance, sweetie. ^^
Nice cliffie. I'm glad I don't have to wait for an update. BWAHAHAHA! (Sometimes being lazy pays off...)
xo
4SerialXLainO.o Your AN makes it sound like you got flamed by an ignorant homophobe. Why don't the ignorant homophobes ever bother ME? ;-; Kidding. Anyway. Sorry if someone did try to spread their ignorance, sweetie. ^^
Nice cliffie. I'm glad I don't have to wait for an update. BWAHAHAHA! (Sometimes being lazy pays off...)
xo
4/3/2007 c2 SerialXLain
"And then they drink. And drive. And die.” “In that order.” Nice quote... Heh.
“Hey, Sleazy.” Ahahah XD
Steven grinned. (Psst. I thinnk you mean Arthur...? :P)
Loving Steven's attitude. ^^
xo
"And then they drink. And drive. And die.” “In that order.” Nice quote... Heh.
“Hey, Sleazy.” Ahahah XD
Steven grinned. (Psst. I thinnk you mean Arthur...? :P)
Loving Steven's attitude. ^^
xo
4/3/2007 c1 SerialXLain
I must say... Thin butts HURT! My friend sits on me a lot and he has the most boney but EVER. ;-;
Jesus... Kayla sounds like me. I break things a lot too...
The carnage in the kitchen is a familiar scene. Heh. And with Manly Man Zone... :shakes head: Never go to a hunting cabin during deer season if you haven't already. It's sickening. XD
xo
I must say... Thin butts HURT! My friend sits on me a lot and he has the most boney but EVER. ;-;
Jesus... Kayla sounds like me. I break things a lot too...
The carnage in the kitchen is a familiar scene. Heh. And with Manly Man Zone... :shakes head: Never go to a hunting cabin during deer season if you haven't already. It's sickening. XD
xo
3/23/2007 c4 magalina
Great story! No, it wasn’t forced or anything. Actually quite realistic... the way they just wanted to get out of there. The need to survive IS in human nature after all and I think anyone (no matter what they say) would do that. Thinking is a joke or not. Okay, there might be a few exceptions...
Anyway, can’t believe he got off so fast! They’re so gonna catch him! I actually was at the edge of my seat in this last chapter :) He doesn’t think to much! It’s an extreme situation, you’re bond to panic!
What else... Oh! Was the guy/girl/thing at the back Arthur? Did the girl got on the bus? Is Lucas really dead? I hope not.
Can’t wait for the next chapter! Please update!
Great story! No, it wasn’t forced or anything. Actually quite realistic... the way they just wanted to get out of there. The need to survive IS in human nature after all and I think anyone (no matter what they say) would do that. Thinking is a joke or not. Okay, there might be a few exceptions...
Anyway, can’t believe he got off so fast! They’re so gonna catch him! I actually was at the edge of my seat in this last chapter :) He doesn’t think to much! It’s an extreme situation, you’re bond to panic!
What else... Oh! Was the guy/girl/thing at the back Arthur? Did the girl got on the bus? Is Lucas really dead? I hope not.
Can’t wait for the next chapter! Please update!
3/22/2007 c4 20TUS
Ohh...very very cool. I like your plot line. It's nice. And I find it super neat that you're basing some of your characters on actual people..
20TUSOhh...very very cool. I like your plot line. It's nice. And I find it super neat that you're basing some of your characters on actual people..
3/10/2007 c1 24Limited Edition
Gosh, I have to say, that's one of the best summaries I've read on fictionpress. The beginning is catchy. It's original and throws the reader straight into the story. The characters are strong, their personality comes through in the dialogue, which also is great; realistic and balanced. But allover, there is a little bit too much dialogue. I like the details. I'm a detail whore XD But details bring so much feeling into the story and give away so much of the character and story. I don't like his brother. He's not my type XD I kinda got the idea that the story will be angsty, from the summary that is, but the story is actually rather lighthearted. Why does it feel like his skin is very dry? Noo, it'll get irritated and red if he continues to rub! Especially if it's dry! OH MY GOD THE CARPET! Le gasp. I would officially kill his father if I were there.
24Limited EditionGosh, I have to say, that's one of the best summaries I've read on fictionpress. The beginning is catchy. It's original and throws the reader straight into the story. The characters are strong, their personality comes through in the dialogue, which also is great; realistic and balanced. But allover, there is a little bit too much dialogue. I like the details. I'm a detail whore XD But details bring so much feeling into the story and give away so much of the character and story. I don't like his brother. He's not my type XD I kinda got the idea that the story will be angsty, from the summary that is, but the story is actually rather lighthearted. Why does it feel like his skin is very dry? Noo, it'll get irritated and red if he continues to rub! Especially if it's dry! OH MY GOD THE CARPET! Le gasp. I would officially kill his father if I were there.
3/3/2007 c4 7Umbrella Maiden
Ooh, I got shivers reading this chapter. Superbly creepy, wonderfully realistic.
7Umbrella MaidenOoh, I got shivers reading this chapter. Superbly creepy, wonderfully realistic.
2/24/2007 c4 deleteaccount128413
i like it
o.o... erm... whos the figure in the back of the bus? they dead? -pokes- i mean... it's sort of freaky and suddenly the girl and everythin'... i dunt make any sense now but... lol... i like it! ^^
please update soon, wanna see if he's gonna make it or get caught or... who's that person at the back of the bus
^^
i like it
o.o... erm... whos the figure in the back of the bus? they dead? -pokes- i mean... it's sort of freaky and suddenly the girl and everythin'... i dunt make any sense now but... lol... i like it! ^^
please update soon, wanna see if he's gonna make it or get caught or... who's that person at the back of the bus
^^