for I Don't Mind OR Ironically Afraid10/19/2007 c1 half-sketched.staccatos
konnichi wa
I *really* liked the first stanza - it was my favorite: "I don't mind standing on the edge / but the thought of falling scares me to death / I don't mind standing in the rain / but my fear of drowning shall always remain."
"But I fear the loneliness I've always known / I've never known which way to go" - It sounds sort of like it's repeating because you used the same words in both lines. You might want to change the wording of one of them.
A really great poem. :)
Zaijen
-Shan-
konnichi wa
I *really* liked the first stanza - it was my favorite: "I don't mind standing on the edge / but the thought of falling scares me to death / I don't mind standing in the rain / but my fear of drowning shall always remain."
"But I fear the loneliness I've always known / I've never known which way to go" - It sounds sort of like it's repeating because you used the same words in both lines. You might want to change the wording of one of them.
A really great poem. :)
Zaijen
-Shan-
3/19/2007 c1 The Reverse Edge Blade
Oh, that was a beautiful song! So full of depth. Your words were so meaningful. This'll go in my favorites, it was so beautiful.
The Reverse Edge Blade
Oh, that was a beautiful song! So full of depth. Your words were so meaningful. This'll go in my favorites, it was so beautiful.
The Reverse Edge Blade
2/3/2007 c1 
11xo Secrets
First Verse Conveyed A Lot Of Emotion & Completely Hooked Me In. & The Bridge... Wow. Quite Beautiful. ^_^
Lots Of Love & Best Wishes
~ xo Secrets
11xo SecretsFirst Verse Conveyed A Lot Of Emotion & Completely Hooked Me In. & The Bridge... Wow. Quite Beautiful. ^_^
Lots Of Love & Best Wishes
~ xo Secrets