for rebirth8/3/2007 c1 
22Lucid Nonsense
Haikus are not my favorite, but with those few words you managed to paint a picture so vivid it came to life.
22Lucid NonsenseHaikus are not my favorite, but with those few words you managed to paint a picture so vivid it came to life.
3/4/2007 c1 871no.peace.los.angeles
Oh, wow, nice haiku. "nascent" isn't a word I hear too often, so that's a nice change of pace. I love the color you've made this sunrise - it's simply breathtaking. Beautiful. Keep writing! :)
871no.peace.los.angelesOh, wow, nice haiku. "nascent" isn't a word I hear too often, so that's a nice change of pace. I love the color you've made this sunrise - it's simply breathtaking. Beautiful. Keep writing! :)
2/6/2007 c1 63lackluster
it's the simplicity that makes this a great poem. it seems like a classic already, like i've read this a hundred times and still i can't get over it.
63lacklusterit's the simplicity that makes this a great poem. it seems like a classic already, like i've read this a hundred times and still i can't get over it.
2/4/2007 c1 26Plastic Roses Never Die
beautiful. i love the last line.
you could work on the flow of the second.
26Plastic Roses Never Diebeautiful. i love the last line.
you could work on the flow of the second.
2/4/2007 c1 177notated descant
I know I'm picky on this, but the second line has 8 syllables when there's supposed to be seven =)
The setting this haiku paints, however, is very descriptive and vivid. I don't believe I've ever heard of the word "nascent" before... gotta remember that one.
Good work! Keep on writing!
177notated descantI know I'm picky on this, but the second line has 8 syllables when there's supposed to be seven =)
The setting this haiku paints, however, is very descriptive and vivid. I don't believe I've ever heard of the word "nascent" before... gotta remember that one.
Good work! Keep on writing!