for I Can See The Sunrise6/2/2008 c1 
24Sarah-Brighteyes
Nice rhyming. I love the sunrise and sunset. I felt though your piece could be longer, but nice job on the rhyming.
24Sarah-BrighteyesNice rhyming. I love the sunrise and sunset. I felt though your piece could be longer, but nice job on the rhyming.
6/14/2007 c1 bipedalcooney
This is so beautifully done. I love the joyful feeling in this piece, and the rhyming is very well written. Amazing work, really like this a lot. Keep writing.
This is so beautifully done. I love the joyful feeling in this piece, and the rhyming is very well written. Amazing work, really like this a lot. Keep writing.
4/9/2007 c1 18theatrical rhapsodies
Oh wow. you really have your own style here. something about this make it very diforent. I like that. Great work.
Love, Ellen
18theatrical rhapsodiesOh wow. you really have your own style here. something about this make it very diforent. I like that. Great work.
Love, Ellen
3/9/2007 c1 174a silenced revolution
I love the feeling behind this. Probably because I haven't read a hopeful poem on this site for a few hours... Lovely.
~Hazellin
174a silenced revolutionI love the feeling behind this. Probably because I haven't read a hopeful poem on this site for a few hours... Lovely.
~Hazellin
2/17/2007 c1 1Marie Ellen
Thanks for the reviews! The bold line in the one was a mistake, an old title that somehow escaped my editing... so thanks! As for the other one "sincere tones" is a bit of irony I decided to indulge in, because the situation is so obviously insincere. Thanks again!
This poem, no pun intended, is really light and happy. The repetition at the beginning and end makes it feel cyclical, just like a sunrise coming morning after morning. The one thing that confused me was the speaker's "surprsie." I think the very predictabilit of the sun rising every morning takes away the element of surprise; however, it also expresses a childlike wonder and awe in your speaker, which is interesting. well done!
1Marie EllenThanks for the reviews! The bold line in the one was a mistake, an old title that somehow escaped my editing... so thanks! As for the other one "sincere tones" is a bit of irony I decided to indulge in, because the situation is so obviously insincere. Thanks again!
This poem, no pun intended, is really light and happy. The repetition at the beginning and end makes it feel cyclical, just like a sunrise coming morning after morning. The one thing that confused me was the speaker's "surprsie." I think the very predictabilit of the sun rising every morning takes away the element of surprise; however, it also expresses a childlike wonder and awe in your speaker, which is interesting. well done!
2/14/2007 c1 16Melos Atriensis
This is very pretty, and the dark/light analogy is expressed quite well. I personally love nature-inspired poems, and this is really beautiful! I especially love the last line. It has such finality. Only, I think you could expand on the piece a bit more. I'm not sure how, that's completely up to you. But in all, this is beautiful. The poem is very peaceful... almost uplifting.
Good job!
.:Scarlett:.
16Melos AtriensisThis is very pretty, and the dark/light analogy is expressed quite well. I personally love nature-inspired poems, and this is really beautiful! I especially love the last line. It has such finality. Only, I think you could expand on the piece a bit more. I'm not sure how, that's completely up to you. But in all, this is beautiful. The poem is very peaceful... almost uplifting.
Good job!
.:Scarlett:.
2/11/2007 c1 she smolders
I just love waking up to the sun shining upon my face. It makes me feel alive. This was well written.
I just love waking up to the sun shining upon my face. It makes me feel alive. This was well written.
2/7/2007 c1 18Rovandin
The whole sunlight/ dark analogy is apretty neat. A little cliche but still interesting.
18RovandinThe whole sunlight/ dark analogy is apretty neat. A little cliche but still interesting.
2/6/2007 c1 24IwasSmitten
The repetition and rhyme create a good flow, and you have a lot of good alliteration. I especially like "Into a dawn no darkness can breach."
24IwasSmittenThe repetition and rhyme create a good flow, and you have a lot of good alliteration. I especially like "Into a dawn no darkness can breach."
2/4/2007 c1 Silence the Storm
Great work, I especially liked the lines 'I can see the sunrise/The morning rays in reach.' Keep it up!
Great work, I especially liked the lines 'I can see the sunrise/The morning rays in reach.' Keep it up!