for Six Weeks With Satan10/5/2011 c20 Whatsoever
I read this a long time back but I'm sorry I took so long to review! I just wantedto tell you that i love this story! It was one of the first I read on Fictionpress and it's one of my absolute favourites! Great job!
I read this a long time back but I'm sorry I took so long to review! I just wantedto tell you that i love this story! It was one of the first I read on Fictionpress and it's one of my absolute favourites! Great job!
10/5/2011 c20 
8SpasticLittleGirl
Let me start by saying sorry for being one of those people who only review the last chapter of a completed story. That said, this was an AMAZING story. I loved the German - it added a few words to my vocabulary :)
It was such a cute story! And I REALLY want to go to Europe now :(
Well, I'm off to read some more of your masterpieces :D
8SpasticLittleGirlLet me start by saying sorry for being one of those people who only review the last chapter of a completed story. That said, this was an AMAZING story. I loved the German - it added a few words to my vocabulary :)
It was such a cute story! And I REALLY want to go to Europe now :(
Well, I'm off to read some more of your masterpieces :D
9/29/2011 c20 Skyless16
I loooooved it! OMG Kurt is adorable! Ugh! You're a really talented person. Keep up the good work!
I loooooved it! OMG Kurt is adorable! Ugh! You're a really talented person. Keep up the good work!
9/22/2011 c2 MusicalfishieXD
That really is my penname, I just have issues logging on while on my phone. I normally don't review til the end, but I have to say that I love the way you did the german conversations. You didn't leave it too long before translating, but you didn't just do the italics/english thing either. I really like it, and the rivalry so far. :)
That really is my penname, I just have issues logging on while on my phone. I normally don't review til the end, but I have to say that I love the way you did the german conversations. You didn't leave it too long before translating, but you didn't just do the italics/english thing either. I really like it, and the rivalry so far. :)
9/16/2011 c20 3Freelance Writing
Alright, how should I even begin? Oh the possibilities!
We'll go easy, shall we?
First off, I loved this story. It helps that I am the most sappy person when it comes to love stories and this was no exception.
Your characters were wonderful as well as the plot. Each were different without making me wonder, "What in the world ever brought these people together?" I applaud you. It was slow, but not dreadfully so that would cause me to lose interest. In fact-if you must know- I has stayed up until 4am just reading like drug addict.
Love is my heroine.
Anyways, I'm getting off topic; my apologies.
As I was saying, your story and development was immensely profound, and being in choir for many years myself (I kick myself in the rear end for not staying in it, but there were many personal issues I had... again, I apologize for getting off topic) and couldn't help but reminisce on some fond memories.
Back to what I was saying... er... typing... you get the idea! I have always loved romantic story lines, and when I had glanced at the title, I was hesitant in reading it truth be told. However, I'm incredibly pleased that of all the stories I could have read, it was yours.
I do have a slight bone to pick with you, there were some spots where your grammar could have been touched up. A synonym here and a simile or two that made me pause and think, "Why would she use that? There could have been a much more pleasent way of saying that," but then again, like any reader, I have my own style and I hope you don't take my little prod the wrong way!
Well, damn, I feel like a jerk... sorry.
Okay, off topic again. I don't know how long this will take, but I assure you that I want to make sure that everything has been said.
Aside from my personal preference when it comes to the English language, I believe your work is beautiful. Kurt was adorable and I love that you focussed on his eyes. I have a tendency of dissolving into a puddle of goo when I'm attracted to someone. I fall quite easily. Limerence is such a horrid thing.
Ah, you're probably yanking your hair right about now in annoyance, right? Well too bad, I'm continuing!
When you had Lotte break down in Berlin, (I'm too tired to remember where and am too lazy to take a look) I nearly fainted. Just being able to feel what the main character is dealing with emotionally at that moment and then continuously throughout makes this story even more wonderful.
Another bone... when it came to the moment in time when Kurt verbally attacked Lotte for her date in Madrid, I couldn't help but become infuriated for a reason you would understand, but might have not taken into consideration.
Her character, although well-developed, didn't stand up to him. She's such a strong girl. I can understand why she reacted the way she did, but I didn't want her to do that.
I wanted her to fight back and be as strong as possible like she had been in her special undies. Instead, she acted submissive. I didn't truly like it, and I'm sorry to say that because I love your characters.
Lotte's just too strong to be that weak and then easily forgive him. I wish she had just fought back. That's just me though, and I believe that would have just altered your story after that. Parallel universe, here we come!
In summary, you're a talented writer who just needs to use a thesaurus every now and then and not to let the characters become opposite of what they've made us believe. This is what I think though, and I can understand if you just flush it down the toilet and not give a rat's ass. I just wanted to share it with you. I feel that I can at least trust you when it comes to things in this realm.
Please, keep writing, if not for your sake, do it for those of us who are thrilled to find quality work on this fantastic site.
I send my regards.
3Freelance WritingAlright, how should I even begin? Oh the possibilities!
We'll go easy, shall we?
First off, I loved this story. It helps that I am the most sappy person when it comes to love stories and this was no exception.
Your characters were wonderful as well as the plot. Each were different without making me wonder, "What in the world ever brought these people together?" I applaud you. It was slow, but not dreadfully so that would cause me to lose interest. In fact-if you must know- I has stayed up until 4am just reading like drug addict.
Love is my heroine.
Anyways, I'm getting off topic; my apologies.
As I was saying, your story and development was immensely profound, and being in choir for many years myself (I kick myself in the rear end for not staying in it, but there were many personal issues I had... again, I apologize for getting off topic) and couldn't help but reminisce on some fond memories.
Back to what I was saying... er... typing... you get the idea! I have always loved romantic story lines, and when I had glanced at the title, I was hesitant in reading it truth be told. However, I'm incredibly pleased that of all the stories I could have read, it was yours.
I do have a slight bone to pick with you, there were some spots where your grammar could have been touched up. A synonym here and a simile or two that made me pause and think, "Why would she use that? There could have been a much more pleasent way of saying that," but then again, like any reader, I have my own style and I hope you don't take my little prod the wrong way!
Well, damn, I feel like a jerk... sorry.
Okay, off topic again. I don't know how long this will take, but I assure you that I want to make sure that everything has been said.
Aside from my personal preference when it comes to the English language, I believe your work is beautiful. Kurt was adorable and I love that you focussed on his eyes. I have a tendency of dissolving into a puddle of goo when I'm attracted to someone. I fall quite easily. Limerence is such a horrid thing.
Ah, you're probably yanking your hair right about now in annoyance, right? Well too bad, I'm continuing!
When you had Lotte break down in Berlin, (I'm too tired to remember where and am too lazy to take a look) I nearly fainted. Just being able to feel what the main character is dealing with emotionally at that moment and then continuously throughout makes this story even more wonderful.
Another bone... when it came to the moment in time when Kurt verbally attacked Lotte for her date in Madrid, I couldn't help but become infuriated for a reason you would understand, but might have not taken into consideration.
Her character, although well-developed, didn't stand up to him. She's such a strong girl. I can understand why she reacted the way she did, but I didn't want her to do that.
I wanted her to fight back and be as strong as possible like she had been in her special undies. Instead, she acted submissive. I didn't truly like it, and I'm sorry to say that because I love your characters.
Lotte's just too strong to be that weak and then easily forgive him. I wish she had just fought back. That's just me though, and I believe that would have just altered your story after that. Parallel universe, here we come!
In summary, you're a talented writer who just needs to use a thesaurus every now and then and not to let the characters become opposite of what they've made us believe. This is what I think though, and I can understand if you just flush it down the toilet and not give a rat's ass. I just wanted to share it with you. I feel that I can at least trust you when it comes to things in this realm.
Please, keep writing, if not for your sake, do it for those of us who are thrilled to find quality work on this fantastic site.
I send my regards.
9/15/2011 c20 Elle's Daisy
I just read this entire story in 3 days. I absolutely love it. I was at the edge of my seat the whole time. Lotte was such a comical & lovable character. Enjoyed the romance, very realistic. It took time for her to realize she was in love & then time for her to accept it. Awesome story! ;)
I just read this entire story in 3 days. I absolutely love it. I was at the edge of my seat the whole time. Lotte was such a comical & lovable character. Enjoyed the romance, very realistic. It took time for her to realize she was in love & then time for her to accept it. Awesome story! ;)
8/30/2011 c20 1CV-S
I love this story! You did a really good job in writing it, but if you have the time it would be better if you fixed the chapter with the paragraphs all jumbled up. I can't remember the exact chapter though, sorry about that.
I'm going to be honest with, I was extremely apprehensive when I started reading this story despite having this story "sit" in my to read list. I don't really know why I felt that way but in any case, you proved me wrong. You had me laughing a lot while I was reading this, which earned me several weird looks from my family, and I truly did enjoy reading this. Good job, and I'm sorry to hear about the plagiarizing issue. I hope you won't stop writing because of it because you are brilliant/amazing.
From
CV-S ^_^
1CV-SI love this story! You did a really good job in writing it, but if you have the time it would be better if you fixed the chapter with the paragraphs all jumbled up. I can't remember the exact chapter though, sorry about that.
I'm going to be honest with, I was extremely apprehensive when I started reading this story despite having this story "sit" in my to read list. I don't really know why I felt that way but in any case, you proved me wrong. You had me laughing a lot while I was reading this, which earned me several weird looks from my family, and I truly did enjoy reading this. Good job, and I'm sorry to hear about the plagiarizing issue. I hope you won't stop writing because of it because you are brilliant/amazing.
From
CV-S ^_^
8/20/2011 c21 2Love-Comes-In-Many-Forms
Woodstock1969,
I realise how angry you must be at this point in time- and just to re-assure you, you write brilliantly and I can almost understand WHY someone would want to plagiarise you, although I can fully well tell you that plagiarism is wrong and illegal where I come from.
I have to say, I was squealing like a rat monkey when I read the part where Kurt tells her he loves her! In Paris... In front of everyone... It's just SO ROMANTIC! I loved it so much and I went to my sisters room and bounced off all my energy and she was all like 'What the hell is wrong with you?' and I said 'SO *Squeal* ROMANTICCCCCCCC!' and then she told me to get the hell out of her room because I was giving her a headache and well... yeah... you get the point!
If it helps any, I went to wattpad.com and typed in your name and there was no-one with the name, so I think that they've removed their account. I appreciate you not taking down the story, it must have been a hard decision but I am so glad that I had the privilege to read this!
Throughout the story, I think I guessed that Kurt loved her, and I kept waiting for her to figure it out to no avail. I love the character of Jane and she reminds me of one of my own friends.
It is an amazing story and I hope that nobody else plagiarises you because you really don't deserve it.
xoxo
Love Comes In Many Forms
2Love-Comes-In-Many-FormsWoodstock1969,
I realise how angry you must be at this point in time- and just to re-assure you, you write brilliantly and I can almost understand WHY someone would want to plagiarise you, although I can fully well tell you that plagiarism is wrong and illegal where I come from.
I have to say, I was squealing like a rat monkey when I read the part where Kurt tells her he loves her! In Paris... In front of everyone... It's just SO ROMANTIC! I loved it so much and I went to my sisters room and bounced off all my energy and she was all like 'What the hell is wrong with you?' and I said 'SO *Squeal* ROMANTICCCCCCCC!' and then she told me to get the hell out of her room because I was giving her a headache and well... yeah... you get the point!
If it helps any, I went to wattpad.com and typed in your name and there was no-one with the name, so I think that they've removed their account. I appreciate you not taking down the story, it must have been a hard decision but I am so glad that I had the privilege to read this!
Throughout the story, I think I guessed that Kurt loved her, and I kept waiting for her to figure it out to no avail. I love the character of Jane and she reminds me of one of my own friends.
It is an amazing story and I hope that nobody else plagiarises you because you really don't deserve it.
xoxo
Love Comes In Many Forms
7/16/2011 c21 fariswheel
That really sucks. I hope he stops, but in the meantime, i love this and a lot of your other stories.
That really sucks. I hope he stops, but in the meantime, i love this and a lot of your other stories.
7/13/2011 c20 insert.witty.username.here
OMG I loved it. Stuck in bed with a fever this totally made my day and it only took me a day I read it all in one sitting! I loved Lotte and Kurt and Eden and Matt they were so adorable together. I wish you wrote a epilogue...
Thank you for the amazing story! :)
OMG I loved it. Stuck in bed with a fever this totally made my day and it only took me a day I read it all in one sitting! I loved Lotte and Kurt and Eden and Matt they were so adorable together. I wish you wrote a epilogue...
Thank you for the amazing story! :)
7/13/2011 c20 The Imagination Addict
Hey! I don’t know if you’re still interested in feedback… so I’ll just keep this short. (It’s mostly praise anyway.)
I think my favourite thing about the whole story was Kurt’s character. He’s cheeky but doesn’t fit the usual stereotype for the love-hate relationship clichés. He isn’t arrogant but shy about his feelings instead. Which is so sweet!
You also brought me to tears a few times with the intensity of Lotte’s emotions. And I really her perspective of the war. Sheds new light, you know? None of the usual “they were monsters”, when not all of them were. A lot of them were following orders in order to protect their livelihood and families. So that’s a nice angle.
I think the character development’s great. They’re very real people. Not as complicated as in some books on this site (especially the characters with issues), but very realistic nonetheless, because not everyone has emotional baggage. Very entertaining and touching portrayal of an everyday, fairytale romance. :)
If there’s anything to improve, I can really only think of one: the bit about them loving each other. Or, rather, the bit about Lotte loving Kurt. I think Kurt’s actions already say enough. He cares for her and shows it, even though he can be cheeky, and I love how realistic you are by having him be a typical horny guy as well. Lotte on the other hand… How she came to her realization of her crush is fine. It’s the ‘loving’ bit that’s an issue. You didn’t have her actually come to a revelation that she loved him. You wrote out her thought process for realizing she liked him but NOT for realizing her love for him. So I think that’s all you really need to edit if you wish to. But even then, it’s not glaringly obvious, since I had to think a bit to figure out what you may need to improve.
So this turned out longer than planned! I just enjoyed this story so so much, and thanks for leaving it up despite the aweful plagiarists! I just hate it when people take their work down cos some idiots plagiarized it. Thanks for this great read, once again!
Hey! I don’t know if you’re still interested in feedback… so I’ll just keep this short. (It’s mostly praise anyway.)
I think my favourite thing about the whole story was Kurt’s character. He’s cheeky but doesn’t fit the usual stereotype for the love-hate relationship clichés. He isn’t arrogant but shy about his feelings instead. Which is so sweet!
You also brought me to tears a few times with the intensity of Lotte’s emotions. And I really her perspective of the war. Sheds new light, you know? None of the usual “they were monsters”, when not all of them were. A lot of them were following orders in order to protect their livelihood and families. So that’s a nice angle.
I think the character development’s great. They’re very real people. Not as complicated as in some books on this site (especially the characters with issues), but very realistic nonetheless, because not everyone has emotional baggage. Very entertaining and touching portrayal of an everyday, fairytale romance. :)
If there’s anything to improve, I can really only think of one: the bit about them loving each other. Or, rather, the bit about Lotte loving Kurt. I think Kurt’s actions already say enough. He cares for her and shows it, even though he can be cheeky, and I love how realistic you are by having him be a typical horny guy as well. Lotte on the other hand… How she came to her realization of her crush is fine. It’s the ‘loving’ bit that’s an issue. You didn’t have her actually come to a revelation that she loved him. You wrote out her thought process for realizing she liked him but NOT for realizing her love for him. So I think that’s all you really need to edit if you wish to. But even then, it’s not glaringly obvious, since I had to think a bit to figure out what you may need to improve.
So this turned out longer than planned! I just enjoyed this story so so much, and thanks for leaving it up despite the aweful plagiarists! I just hate it when people take their work down cos some idiots plagiarized it. Thanks for this great read, once again!
7/11/2011 c1 The Imagination Addict
what's good is that u provide the german translation directly after each sentence. there was a story i read where the protagonist's home language was french. the author provided translations at the bottom of the chapter, but it was infuriating cos i kept having to scroll down. so, good job on being practical!
what's good is that u provide the german translation directly after each sentence. there was a story i read where the protagonist's home language was french. the author provided translations at the bottom of the chapter, but it was infuriating cos i kept having to scroll down. so, good job on being practical!
7/11/2011 c17 3Lost and No One Cares
The restaurant you mentioned? 'Gusto?
I actually ate there a couple of weeks ago... I guess one of those weird coincidences
Really enjoyed this story too, but that's a given I guess
3Lost and No One CaresThe restaurant you mentioned? 'Gusto?
I actually ate there a couple of weeks ago... I guess one of those weird coincidences
Really enjoyed this story too, but that's a given I guess