for Hidden Fear
12/16/2010 c1 faiswingedchronicles
aww poor guy. Your fic actually made me see exactly how tramutizing being hit by your loved one is.
aww poor guy. Your fic actually made me see exactly how tramutizing being hit by your loved one is.
11/3/2007 c1 RS
Will has the typical reaction of someone who abuses (the "I'm sorry, I'll never do it again" reaction -so, good characterization)... sadly, physical violence usually escalates. I know, it's fiction. But it's enough of a reality for some people that I hope your character can find a way out :/
Will has the typical reaction of someone who abuses (the "I'm sorry, I'll never do it again" reaction -so, good characterization)... sadly, physical violence usually escalates. I know, it's fiction. But it's enough of a reality for some people that I hope your character can find a way out :/
2/17/2007 c1 L. A. Solvang
It was nice, but I'd not have used italic to mark the "flashback", because it distorts the reading ability. And Will didn't really strike me as a typical male with his words and reaction. Other than that it was well written and interesting.
It was nice, but I'd not have used italic to mark the "flashback", because it distorts the reading ability. And Will didn't really strike me as a typical male with his words and reaction. Other than that it was well written and interesting.
2/13/2007 c1 Clico78
Not bad, Will kind of sounded like a girl rather than a guy though. And I wouldn't have had bold words like that either, though I know it was to show emphasis... I think it was a little cheesy.
-Asher
Not bad, Will kind of sounded like a girl rather than a guy though. And I wouldn't have had bold words like that either, though I know it was to show emphasis... I think it was a little cheesy.
-Asher