for Point Of View2/15/2007 c1 
102Midnight In Eden
I'm assuming the "then" in line two is "them" otherwise I don't think it quite makes sense.
I think you've got a good opening line and a nice idea but your language comes off a tad cliched ie: "A shining beacon of hope." and "A bright angel". I think reworking those two images would really help keep this interesting. Also the semi colon on line three should either be a comma and the comma on the next line a colon.
Otherwise, short and to the point. Nice work.
.:midnight:.
102Midnight In EdenI'm assuming the "then" in line two is "them" otherwise I don't think it quite makes sense.
I think you've got a good opening line and a nice idea but your language comes off a tad cliched ie: "A shining beacon of hope." and "A bright angel". I think reworking those two images would really help keep this interesting. Also the semi colon on line three should either be a comma and the comma on the next line a colon.
Otherwise, short and to the point. Nice work.
.:midnight:.