for Russian Roulette Adrenaline Rush3/9/2008 c1 123454321
This read almost as a chant in my mind. Very rhythmatic and transe inducing. Very nice.
I agree with Eric that it is repetitive and I usually frown on that, but in this piece it works well.
-J.A.
Courtesy of the review marathon (link on profile).
This read almost as a chant in my mind. Very rhythmatic and transe inducing. Very nice.
I agree with Eric that it is repetitive and I usually frown on that, but in this piece it works well.
-J.A.
Courtesy of the review marathon (link on profile).
2/26/2008 c1 
72angel953
Me maybe? lol
This is really cool. The flow works well with the topic..nice
~angel953
p.s. hahaha sr. dianne lolz
72angel953Me maybe? lol
This is really cool. The flow works well with the topic..nice
~angel953
p.s. hahaha sr. dianne lolz
3/27/2007 c1 44Alyosha Karamazov
the short lines slip easily into the next, making the rythem more or less the same as the adrenaline rush you write about. The poem's flow matches the content and that is a powerful tool to use as a writer. Love the repetition also, holds it all together perfectly. Once again, good job!
44Alyosha Karamazovthe short lines slip easily into the next, making the rythem more or less the same as the adrenaline rush you write about. The poem's flow matches the content and that is a powerful tool to use as a writer. Love the repetition also, holds it all together perfectly. Once again, good job!
2/22/2007 c1 54the unreal
it reminds me of playing chicken.
just driving straight towards a cliff,
and whoever stops first loses.
ohh the russian roulette thing from school!
54the unrealit reminds me of playing chicken.
just driving straight towards a cliff,
and whoever stops first loses.
ohh the russian roulette thing from school!
2/18/2007 c1 113Travis C. Eckert
Good job, and a lot of repeating for this piece. And even if you don't know what Russian Roulette is you can pretty much get the point.
113Travis C. EckertGood job, and a lot of repeating for this piece. And even if you don't know what Russian Roulette is you can pretty much get the point.
2/18/2007 c1 94shookierewrites
A guy down the street from me actually died a few months ago from Russian Roulette. Crazy... Another friend of mine played often before he sobered up and he's deaf in his left ear from the bullet jamming in the barrell (thank God it did). Crazy...
-Shookie Smiles Sweetly
94shookierewritesA guy down the street from me actually died a few months ago from Russian Roulette. Crazy... Another friend of mine played often before he sobered up and he's deaf in his left ear from the bullet jamming in the barrell (thank God it did). Crazy...
-Shookie Smiles Sweetly