2/27/2007 c1 2sicklysnowwhite
"a lie

untruth

the opposite

of who she is"

the beat is off there, and the same for the beginning. the ending is vary good though and the whole poem is marginally discriptive. good job.

2/22/2007 c1 92burning in effigy
interesting poem and idea.. i'm not sure i follow it though.. kind of confused at the "a subway mask"

subway mask? reminds me of the sandwiches. i know i'm totally off, but i do like the short lines- seems fitting in a way

loving the ending :)