for summers were for running3/13/2007 c1 
174a silenced revolution
I love this. Breaking the rules. Living outside the box. Being free. You incorporate these concepts so well without it seeming forced. Great.
174a silenced revolutionI love this. Breaking the rules. Living outside the box. Being free. You incorporate these concepts so well without it seeming forced. Great.
2/28/2007 c1 1rage of aquarius
there is something in this that is inherently feminist. it makes me ache with its beauty, and for my own nostalgia, and for my wish that i'd realized the truth in this poem a long time ago.
1rage of aquariusthere is something in this that is inherently feminist. it makes me ache with its beauty, and for my own nostalgia, and for my wish that i'd realized the truth in this poem a long time ago.
2/27/2007 c1 879Moondog Dozier
This truly captures a great deal of the divide between innocence and the "real" world. The way that the character is described and portrayed really paints a vivid relatable picture. I like how you've brought in the specifics of a tomboy unknown. Especially the mothers response to what might happen in the future if she remains that carefree way. Very slice of life. Excellent visual scene. Great write.
879Moondog DozierThis truly captures a great deal of the divide between innocence and the "real" world. The way that the character is described and portrayed really paints a vivid relatable picture. I like how you've brought in the specifics of a tomboy unknown. Especially the mothers response to what might happen in the future if she remains that carefree way. Very slice of life. Excellent visual scene. Great write.
2/25/2007 c1 she smolders
I know how great it feels to break a few rules sometimes and just enjoy being your own person. The title of this is also so true since I think of my summers in the same away and the line breaks are very effective.
I know how great it feels to break a few rules sometimes and just enjoy being your own person. The title of this is also so true since I think of my summers in the same away and the line breaks are very effective.
2/25/2007 c1 3tangelos
i cannot help but fall in love with the girl in your poem although i must have seen her before someowhere else- she is almost the typical spunky heroine, very contemporary, very likeable. interesting syntax in lines like "no place for unripped/dresses" and "misplaced displeasure". Your line breaks give me a sense of meaning despite the apparent chaos. do keep writing! :)
3tangelosi cannot help but fall in love with the girl in your poem although i must have seen her before someowhere else- she is almost the typical spunky heroine, very contemporary, very likeable. interesting syntax in lines like "no place for unripped/dresses" and "misplaced displeasure". Your line breaks give me a sense of meaning despite the apparent chaos. do keep writing! :)