for The Return3/25/2007 c1 
174a silenced revolution
That was very beautiful. Flowed very nicely and I enjoyed the word choice and feeling it evoked. Keep it up!
-PQ
174a silenced revolutionThat was very beautiful. Flowed very nicely and I enjoyed the word choice and feeling it evoked. Keep it up!
-PQ
3/3/2007 c1 879Moondog Dozier
I like the tangibility of the images in this. Very vibrant, and yet haunting in a way. It speaks of a greater overall concept than the specifics entail. "ghostly in the canopy", is marvelous phrasework. Well written.
879Moondog DozierI like the tangibility of the images in this. Very vibrant, and yet haunting in a way. It speaks of a greater overall concept than the specifics entail. "ghostly in the canopy", is marvelous phrasework. Well written.
3/1/2007 c1 5darknessblooms
I like the dedication you put for the description of this piece. This reminds me of how I feel when I finally finish a piece of prose, or poetry, or artwork. It feels exactly "like footsteps [returning] to the dawning shore." Thank you for the reminder. Maybe I should stop stalling and throw myself back into my art.
5darknessbloomsI like the dedication you put for the description of this piece. This reminds me of how I feel when I finally finish a piece of prose, or poetry, or artwork. It feels exactly "like footsteps [returning] to the dawning shore." Thank you for the reminder. Maybe I should stop stalling and throw myself back into my art.
2/26/2007 c1 18Libertas
I like how this poem flows so nicely, especially the second stanza! There's some very beautiful phrases there.. 'sand-in-seashell song', 'footsteps to the dawning shore', and so on. Do keep writing! :)
18LibertasI like how this poem flows so nicely, especially the second stanza! There's some very beautiful phrases there.. 'sand-in-seashell song', 'footsteps to the dawning shore', and so on. Do keep writing! :)
2/25/2007 c1 32eldrin
This is rather gorgeous. The flow, the tone, are lovely. You've certainly mastered the sounds that it takes to enforce this strong-wistful, nostalgia turned to future sight tone. Then, of course, there's the wonderful imagery-turned-symbolism of the fronds/fruit/bud that just fills me with delight. And some remarkable turns of phrase: "as much as the night could see" and "sand-in-seashell song." If this is just the beginning of the return to writing, I can't wait to see what else you bring out. Good work.
32eldrinThis is rather gorgeous. The flow, the tone, are lovely. You've certainly mastered the sounds that it takes to enforce this strong-wistful, nostalgia turned to future sight tone. Then, of course, there's the wonderful imagery-turned-symbolism of the fronds/fruit/bud that just fills me with delight. And some remarkable turns of phrase: "as much as the night could see" and "sand-in-seashell song." If this is just the beginning of the return to writing, I can't wait to see what else you bring out. Good work.