for Predator2/25/2007 c1 
24Hazeleyed Everglades
Wow, this is pretty good! ^^ I like it, especially how well you rhymed everything. Very nice. The only speedbumps I hit (where my inner reader trips) was how the lines didn't have the same amount of syllables. It messed up the flow a little.
But besides that, I really like it! Good job!
24Hazeleyed EvergladesWow, this is pretty good! ^^ I like it, especially how well you rhymed everything. Very nice. The only speedbumps I hit (where my inner reader trips) was how the lines didn't have the same amount of syllables. It messed up the flow a little.
But besides that, I really like it! Good job!