for Sebastian Bear Invisible Pervert9/18/2012 c21 
4Mary Chrys
I just love this story so much, I've probably read it, like, five times. It just makes me so warm and fuzzy and perfect!
4Mary ChrysI just love this story so much, I've probably read it, like, five times. It just makes me so warm and fuzzy and perfect!
9/12/2012 c21 1EmmBee95
This has been an incredible couple of days, reading this. I want to that you for producing such a wonderful story. I want a sebastian. XD
This is one of the best stories (I'll call it novel because of its length) on FP. Im not just saying that, i mean it.
With a little editing i think its publishable. Seriously. Publish it so i can buy it.
-Madi
1EmmBee95This has been an incredible couple of days, reading this. I want to that you for producing such a wonderful story. I want a sebastian. XD
This is one of the best stories (I'll call it novel because of its length) on FP. Im not just saying that, i mean it.
With a little editing i think its publishable. Seriously. Publish it so i can buy it.
-Madi
9/7/2012 c21 Imlivingondreams
I absolutely love this story! My favorite on fictionpress, and definitely made my top five favorite books/stories of all time. It's funny, romantic and just plain adorable. I hope when you get the time you can edit and possibly get it published. I could see this being a movie or even an anime with all its fantasy and comic elements.
Putting it simply. Well done! :-
I absolutely love this story! My favorite on fictionpress, and definitely made my top five favorite books/stories of all time. It's funny, romantic and just plain adorable. I hope when you get the time you can edit and possibly get it published. I could see this being a movie or even an anime with all its fantasy and comic elements.
Putting it simply. Well done! :-
8/29/2012 c4 xxDarkQueenxx
This is... interesting. It's different, but that's kind of what drew me to the story. I really like it.
This is... interesting. It's different, but that's kind of what drew me to the story. I really like it.
8/8/2012 c21 Kyleeishere1
I just read this story all the way through, and oh my goodness it was so good! I know it's been finished for a while now, but I just found it. I couldn't stop reading! I LOVE the storyline, and the whole 'imaginary friend' thing in general. Thinking about imaginary friends makes me feel ridiculously warm and fuzzy on the inside, like going to Disney World. It's insane. So I ADORED the plot and thought it was simply GENIUS! Well done!
Goodness, and when he came back at the end I was just an explosion of feels. The way you described him walking up the lane and the way he looked, ugh. I was just perfect. Bless you.
Thank you SO much for posting this lovely story for us to read! You're amazing!
Much love
Kylee xoxo
I just read this story all the way through, and oh my goodness it was so good! I know it's been finished for a while now, but I just found it. I couldn't stop reading! I LOVE the storyline, and the whole 'imaginary friend' thing in general. Thinking about imaginary friends makes me feel ridiculously warm and fuzzy on the inside, like going to Disney World. It's insane. So I ADORED the plot and thought it was simply GENIUS! Well done!
Goodness, and when he came back at the end I was just an explosion of feels. The way you described him walking up the lane and the way he looked, ugh. I was just perfect. Bless you.
Thank you SO much for posting this lovely story for us to read! You're amazing!
Much love
Kylee xoxo
7/31/2012 c21 Choukou
I love love love this story! Yes, there were a lot of grammatical and spelling errors, but I didn't care enough to stop and correct them because I was too engrossed in reading this story. I was amazing, and I couldn't help but to sigh in happiness over them ;)
I love love love this story! Yes, there were a lot of grammatical and spelling errors, but I didn't care enough to stop and correct them because I was too engrossed in reading this story. I was amazing, and I couldn't help but to sigh in happiness over them ;)
7/11/2012 c1 3fellintothemoon
Hello! This is Melissa from ADoR. We've been rewriting old reviews to make them more spectacular and I rewrote the Sebastian Bear one! Here's your rewrite:
Melissa Thinks: I think almost every person has invisible friends at some point in their childhood and so, this story should appeal to most of you. Maddie was a normal kid with a normal imaginary friend. Except most kids grow out of their imaginary friends; they fade into the back of their minds. But Maddie's situation is now more than abnormal because guess what? Her imaginary friend has come back and once again, only she can see him. They're both older now. And this time, he wants something a little more than a play mate.
I might have to stop myself from gushing about this story. I think it's safe to say that this is a favorite of all the judges, including myself. It's one of the most creative plots ever. That's what makes it so unpredictable. Who would've thought that an imaginary friend could be so sexy? The characters aren't just memorable, they're downright unforgettable! Maddie is so badass, Sebastian is a sexy sweetheart, and even a more minor character (and the main character of the sequel), Lucian Boom is characterized beautifully. Touched with humor and desire, Sebastian Bear: Invisible Pervert leaves you breathless frequently throughout the read. And even though the plot line is completely fantasy, Sebastian’s origins and the reasoning behind his return is plausible. Fair warning though: if you plan to read this story you might want to make sure you have a huge chunk of free time, because you’re not gonna be able to stop once you start.
3fellintothemoonHello! This is Melissa from ADoR. We've been rewriting old reviews to make them more spectacular and I rewrote the Sebastian Bear one! Here's your rewrite:
Melissa Thinks: I think almost every person has invisible friends at some point in their childhood and so, this story should appeal to most of you. Maddie was a normal kid with a normal imaginary friend. Except most kids grow out of their imaginary friends; they fade into the back of their minds. But Maddie's situation is now more than abnormal because guess what? Her imaginary friend has come back and once again, only she can see him. They're both older now. And this time, he wants something a little more than a play mate.
I might have to stop myself from gushing about this story. I think it's safe to say that this is a favorite of all the judges, including myself. It's one of the most creative plots ever. That's what makes it so unpredictable. Who would've thought that an imaginary friend could be so sexy? The characters aren't just memorable, they're downright unforgettable! Maddie is so badass, Sebastian is a sexy sweetheart, and even a more minor character (and the main character of the sequel), Lucian Boom is characterized beautifully. Touched with humor and desire, Sebastian Bear: Invisible Pervert leaves you breathless frequently throughout the read. And even though the plot line is completely fantasy, Sebastian’s origins and the reasoning behind his return is plausible. Fair warning though: if you plan to read this story you might want to make sure you have a huge chunk of free time, because you’re not gonna be able to stop once you start.
6/25/2012 c21 Tipsintteri
This is so beautiful! It was amazing... I'm speechless :D Thank you for writing this wonderful story and sharing it with us :)
This is so beautiful! It was amazing... I'm speechless :D Thank you for writing this wonderful story and sharing it with us :)
5/19/2012 c1 25S.E.Cates
It's been so long since this was published that I doubt you even get online anymore. I barely even do, but I just wanted to say that this is my favorite story on FictionPress. I've seriously reread it so many times. And yeah, I guess I just wanted to say thank you.
25S.E.CatesIt's been so long since this was published that I doubt you even get online anymore. I barely even do, but I just wanted to say that this is my favorite story on FictionPress. I've seriously reread it so many times. And yeah, I guess I just wanted to say thank you.
4/27/2012 c10 wonderland212
So far really enjoying this story...very original which is rare on fp.i wonder when Elise will finally just take advantage of Seb without freaking out.
But one thing that I've noticed is that u sometimes make Elise try too hard to prove that her friendships are only platonic. I mean I'm all for a romance b/w Seb and her but she doesn't have to constantly push so hard to get her point across. For instance, in like the first chapter she must have used the word "platonic" or confirmed how much she didn't love Nolan in "that way" at least 5 or 6 times.
Then she meets Gray and although she's attracted and has had naughty dreams about him, she spends the whole chapter being kind of a bitch to him or constantly mentioning how self-absorbed he is as if she is trying to justify or prove that she doesn't like him. And soon after, she spends the whole date with Dylan telling us over and over and over again how not interested she is in him.
It's like we get it,lol, you don't like anyone but Seb...we get it. I mean there is nothing wrong with being attracted to another guy...that doesn't somehow make us believe that she doesn't have feelings for Seb..it just seems like u may be pushing a bit too hard in trying to convey to us who she is "meant" to be with. Now I may be wrong, but that's just how it is coming off to me.
So far really enjoying this story...very original which is rare on fp.i wonder when Elise will finally just take advantage of Seb without freaking out.
But one thing that I've noticed is that u sometimes make Elise try too hard to prove that her friendships are only platonic. I mean I'm all for a romance b/w Seb and her but she doesn't have to constantly push so hard to get her point across. For instance, in like the first chapter she must have used the word "platonic" or confirmed how much she didn't love Nolan in "that way" at least 5 or 6 times.
Then she meets Gray and although she's attracted and has had naughty dreams about him, she spends the whole chapter being kind of a bitch to him or constantly mentioning how self-absorbed he is as if she is trying to justify or prove that she doesn't like him. And soon after, she spends the whole date with Dylan telling us over and over and over again how not interested she is in him.
It's like we get it,lol, you don't like anyone but Seb...we get it. I mean there is nothing wrong with being attracted to another guy...that doesn't somehow make us believe that she doesn't have feelings for Seb..it just seems like u may be pushing a bit too hard in trying to convey to us who she is "meant" to be with. Now I may be wrong, but that's just how it is coming off to me.
3/23/2012 c21 DrivebyBodypierce
I loved this story! Your style of writing is charming and your sense of humor is phenomenal! Now I kinda wish I'd had an invisible friend and wonder if not having had one says something about my level of creativity...hmmm. Anywho. Absolutely brilliant and made me want to watch "Drop Dead Fred". Please continue to feed my invisible friend envy.
I loved this story! Your style of writing is charming and your sense of humor is phenomenal! Now I kinda wish I'd had an invisible friend and wonder if not having had one says something about my level of creativity...hmmm. Anywho. Absolutely brilliant and made me want to watch "Drop Dead Fred". Please continue to feed my invisible friend envy.