for Geek to God? SAY WHAT?11/22/2011 c12 ofi
hi..this is your sister writing...this is my scathing comment...
SCAAAATHIINNNNGGGG...
hi..this is your sister writing...this is my scathing comment...
SCAAAATHIINNNNGGGG...
11/22/2011 c11 moscalover
I love the story
I loved this chapter
and NO ABSOLUTLY NOT! Don't you dare end this story :|
I love the story
I loved this chapter
and NO ABSOLUTLY NOT! Don't you dare end this story :|
3/5/2011 c12 Neon pixie
please please please please finish this story. its actually pretty good. very cute. please reconsider :)if only this was finished, i could have recommended it to my friends :)
please please please please finish this story. its actually pretty good. very cute. please reconsider :)if only this was finished, i could have recommended it to my friends :)
11/26/2010 c12 Danielle
finish it please :)
finish it please :)
9/19/2010 c4 skye1200
I LOVE THE STORY. I love the plot. Currently, my favorite character is kait because we're the same age :]
I LOVE THE STORY. I love the plot. Currently, my favorite character is kait because we're the same age :]
7/5/2010 c12 
8Francine Brown
Keep going with the story! I love it!
~Francine Brown
P.S Excuse the exclamation points lol
8Francine BrownKeep going with the story! I love it!
~Francine Brown
P.S Excuse the exclamation points lol
7/2/2010 c12 nooooooooooooooooooooooooooope
Rewrite. You can make it longer and less cliched.
Other than that, this was a very cute story :)
Rewrite. You can make it longer and less cliched.
Other than that, this was a very cute story :)
4/12/2010 c12 1ToastieJinx
You need to continue this I love it!
I want to know what's gonna come next like! AH!
1ToastieJinxYou need to continue this I love it!
I want to know what's gonna come next like! AH!
12/10/2009 c12 sarcasm is my middle name
Like it... write one more chappy and an epilogue... so then you have time to wrap up the story, while not dragging it on.
Like it... write one more chappy and an epilogue... so then you have time to wrap up the story, while not dragging it on.
11/29/2009 c12 1Jinxed Rogue
I enjoyed the sample of your story and I decided to answer your note.
As someone who has been in this position before, my advice is to finish the story first, then revise it at a later date, it's just easier that way. Complete before an ending have a way of messing up the flow of the story, and most people I know end up having to go back to the original to finish it. The only exception should be if there were too many years between when you wrote the first draft and when you're revising it.
Also, leave the original draft up, and post the revised edition with a better title. It's an adorable story with cute characters, it'd be a loss to your readers if you get rid of it.
Ideas for when you revise it (after finishing;) :
1) Set up the story better, the first chapter should be a prologue of James and Leah's time together before his move, then the next chapter takes place a year later.
2) Don't have everyone laughing at Leah about James liking her. Make the changes more subtle and drawn out.
3) No knifing anyone, it's not one of *those* stories.
4) If you want, you can make James a bit more creepy in his pursuit of Leah in an under your skin kind of way or he could be a jerk who ignores her. (This is only an idea if you want to use it.) Either way, James' personality outside of Leah needs to be developed more.
5) The subplot of Leah's father should have come in before he showed up, it could just be a simple mention when introducing the other characters.
Good luck and I can't wait to see the end!
1Jinxed RogueI enjoyed the sample of your story and I decided to answer your note.
As someone who has been in this position before, my advice is to finish the story first, then revise it at a later date, it's just easier that way. Complete before an ending have a way of messing up the flow of the story, and most people I know end up having to go back to the original to finish it. The only exception should be if there were too many years between when you wrote the first draft and when you're revising it.
Also, leave the original draft up, and post the revised edition with a better title. It's an adorable story with cute characters, it'd be a loss to your readers if you get rid of it.
Ideas for when you revise it (after finishing;) :
1) Set up the story better, the first chapter should be a prologue of James and Leah's time together before his move, then the next chapter takes place a year later.
2) Don't have everyone laughing at Leah about James liking her. Make the changes more subtle and drawn out.
3) No knifing anyone, it's not one of *those* stories.
4) If you want, you can make James a bit more creepy in his pursuit of Leah in an under your skin kind of way or he could be a jerk who ignores her. (This is only an idea if you want to use it.) Either way, James' personality outside of Leah needs to be developed more.
5) The subplot of Leah's father should have come in before he showed up, it could just be a simple mention when introducing the other characters.
Good luck and I can't wait to see the end!
11/29/2009 c7 Jinxed Rogue
the random knifing was a really bad idea. i think james still likes leah best.
the random knifing was a really bad idea. i think james still likes leah best.
11/29/2009 c12 1danni-loves-too-reid
I myself think its a fantastic story! i was looking for some good stories n they were jus boring me! And wwhen i looked at this one and started to read it automatically caught my intrest! Im just so upset that u want to end it so soon! I know your busy an all but i think that this story needs to be continued! i love it an cant wait to see more of james, and leah, n hopefully kait, brook n the rest of the awesome charcters!
1danni-loves-too-reidI myself think its a fantastic story! i was looking for some good stories n they were jus boring me! And wwhen i looked at this one and started to read it automatically caught my intrest! Im just so upset that u want to end it so soon! I know your busy an all but i think that this story needs to be continued! i love it an cant wait to see more of james, and leah, n hopefully kait, brook n the rest of the awesome charcters!