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2/27/2007 c1 15x-kit-x
Unusual - especially for you, but fantastic nonetheless. It was different and deep, you really got a feel for his regret towards the end...

The only little thing i noticed was "I finally pried my eyes opened", should be open not opened.

Keep it up. Oh and should I ever become an alcoholic who is not good enough for my little sister I command you to find a different way to show me than beating it into me :D

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