for The Deadly Flower5/11/2007 c4 
2divinexglory
I so totally knew he was a vampire! I should be a private investigator! JK.
2divinexgloryI so totally knew he was a vampire! I should be a private investigator! JK.
5/11/2007 c3 divinexglory
A lot on the character Dahlia; I feel like I've known her some time ago. You are a great story-teller; I have found no mistakes (that I can remember), and I realy love this story. I wouldn't mind buying this if it were published.
A lot on the character Dahlia; I feel like I've known her some time ago. You are a great story-teller; I have found no mistakes (that I can remember), and I realy love this story. I wouldn't mind buying this if it were published.
5/11/2007 c1 divinexglory
This is a very good start, and though it's short, it really says a lot. Good job (I read this all before, but in business class, so I'm finally reviewing, LOL).
This is a very good start, and though it's short, it really says a lot. Good job (I read this all before, but in business class, so I'm finally reviewing, LOL).
5/11/2007 c8 2Rizzy
I'm convinced all the great men are really really old XD Then again I'm so biased
2RizzyI'm convinced all the great men are really really old XD Then again I'm so biased
5/11/2007 c2 2blackdogman
WOW! I just read your story and by the 3rd paragraph I was HOOKED! It's that good! I didn't think that anyone was that good! Hey if you want to read stories about ghostes and everything you should look up KitKun101.
2blackdogmanWOW! I just read your story and by the 3rd paragraph I was HOOKED! It's that good! I didn't think that anyone was that good! Hey if you want to read stories about ghostes and everything you should look up KitKun101.
5/10/2007 c2 2Rizzy
Hey there thanks for reading my story! I definitely appreciate your review and ahah so sorry about your cup of tea!
Returning the favor and I'm hooked! Everything flows at the right pace and the protagonist is relatable :D Not to mention Will sounds like a sweetheart!
2RizzyHey there thanks for reading my story! I definitely appreciate your review and ahah so sorry about your cup of tea!
Returning the favor and I'm hooked! Everything flows at the right pace and the protagonist is relatable :D Not to mention Will sounds like a sweetheart!
5/10/2007 c1 6iantoniali
OMG!
Its awesomee!
Extremely well written, I heart the characters!
I loved every and each chapter of yours, so keep it up!
Your plot is absolutely amazing.
Hugs-
6iantonialiOMG!
Its awesomee!
Extremely well written, I heart the characters!
I loved every and each chapter of yours, so keep it up!
Your plot is absolutely amazing.
Hugs-
5/10/2007 c8 22marinawings
i absolutely love this story! your characters are wonderful! i am already quite attached to dahlia and callum. and i love the plot. it's so unique. i've actually been working on my own vampire story for awhile now, so it's cool to read someone else's. keep up the excellent work!
22marinawingsi absolutely love this story! your characters are wonderful! i am already quite attached to dahlia and callum. and i love the plot. it's so unique. i've actually been working on my own vampire story for awhile now, so it's cool to read someone else's. keep up the excellent work!
5/10/2007 c1 3Agapantha
Hey thanks again for reviewing my stuff. I thought I'd return the favour, but it hardly seems to be worth it - 154 and what not. How do you do it? Must be the summary I reckon, twas a good summary. Do you think you could do mine? No? Oh well.
Sorry, should probably review your story - of course I've only read the prologue and it's quite short so I'm no sure what to say really, only that it was a very dramatic start plot wise and I shall definitely read on. Great Prologue.
Agapantha
3AgapanthaHey thanks again for reviewing my stuff. I thought I'd return the favour, but it hardly seems to be worth it - 154 and what not. How do you do it? Must be the summary I reckon, twas a good summary. Do you think you could do mine? No? Oh well.
Sorry, should probably review your story - of course I've only read the prologue and it's quite short so I'm no sure what to say really, only that it was a very dramatic start plot wise and I shall definitely read on. Great Prologue.
Agapantha
5/9/2007 c8 7Euphorialie
Wow. Wow. That was completely mysteriable (I make up words when I get excited). I. Loved. It. I can't wait to find out what happens! And I can't wait for Callum and Dahlia to get to know each other better. I'm hoping for some jealousy of Dahlia between Will and Callum (mostly Will), and basically in general I can't wait for an update. NO LITERALLY, CAN'T WAIT. I'm going to go rock back and forth in a corner until the next chapter is up.
7EuphorialieWow. Wow. That was completely mysteriable (I make up words when I get excited). I. Loved. It. I can't wait to find out what happens! And I can't wait for Callum and Dahlia to get to know each other better. I'm hoping for some jealousy of Dahlia between Will and Callum (mostly Will), and basically in general I can't wait for an update. NO LITERALLY, CAN'T WAIT. I'm going to go rock back and forth in a corner until the next chapter is up.
5/9/2007 c5 Euphorialie
I just finished reading this chapter and I absolutely couldn't wait to comment because this was definitely the best so far. I loved how this chapter showed Dahlia in action and I can't wait to figure out what happened between her and Will! This is absolutely amazing and I am officially sucked in.
I just finished reading this chapter and I absolutely couldn't wait to comment because this was definitely the best so far. I loved how this chapter showed Dahlia in action and I can't wait to figure out what happened between her and Will! This is absolutely amazing and I am officially sucked in.
5/9/2007 c1 4Raymond Lamar Gilstrap
I like this prologue! I really do and it is just a prologue! I can't wait to read more. Thanks for reviewing my story. Hey I have C2 community called the Covenant. You should check it out and if you are interested, I would really like for you to join. I am looking for talented writers on fictionpress and you fit the bill. Just let me know somehow if you are interested.
Until next Time . . . .
PS Chapter Two is up on my story Beneath the Glass Lake so please keep R&R.
4Raymond Lamar GilstrapI like this prologue! I really do and it is just a prologue! I can't wait to read more. Thanks for reviewing my story. Hey I have C2 community called the Covenant. You should check it out and if you are interested, I would really like for you to join. I am looking for talented writers on fictionpress and you fit the bill. Just let me know somehow if you are interested.
Until next Time . . . .
PS Chapter Two is up on my story Beneath the Glass Lake so please keep R&R.
5/9/2007 c8 MM
holy chickens. that was a beautiful chapter. i think you already know this, but i love callum. i love the way dalia and him talk with each other. i love the way you write in first person, so its like were with dalia. i love the way you write period. best damn author on here, in my opinion. update soon x. MM
holy chickens. that was a beautiful chapter. i think you already know this, but i love callum. i love the way dalia and him talk with each other. i love the way you write in first person, so its like were with dalia. i love the way you write period. best damn author on here, in my opinion. update soon x. MM
5/8/2007 c2 Rei Sengoku
Another well written chapter in this story. I really enjoyed the tension between Dahlia and Will. Writing in first person has always been rough for me, but you do it quite well and with nice flare.
Another well written chapter in this story. I really enjoyed the tension between Dahlia and Will. Writing in first person has always been rough for me, but you do it quite well and with nice flare.