for Twenty Questions1/4/2009 c1 
4Old-Wives-Tale
I thought that was okay. A little weird and far-fetched, but a good read and okay.
"The woman is making attempts to lead the girl away from sign, perhaps toward a hospital, but she is resisting."
"The" needs to be put in between "from" and "sign."
I wish you would've made that woman explain herself a little more though. You know, the one who was concerned about the girl and not the boy.
4Old-Wives-TaleI thought that was okay. A little weird and far-fetched, but a good read and okay.
"The woman is making attempts to lead the girl away from sign, perhaps toward a hospital, but she is resisting."
"The" needs to be put in between "from" and "sign."
I wish you would've made that woman explain herself a little more though. You know, the one who was concerned about the girl and not the boy.
6/7/2008 c1 7anymysteryleft
Very interesting premise.
The dialogue on Ryan's part, I felt, was gradual and expressive without being jumpy.
Also liked the element of unknown relationship between Ryan and girl.
Perhaps a peek into unconnected bits and pieces of their past?
Good work.
7anymysteryleftVery interesting premise.
The dialogue on Ryan's part, I felt, was gradual and expressive without being jumpy.
Also liked the element of unknown relationship between Ryan and girl.
Perhaps a peek into unconnected bits and pieces of their past?
Good work.
3/1/2007 c1 OneDay
That was so sweat! i loved it!...hehe thats really all i have to say...
That was so sweat! i loved it!...hehe thats really all i have to say...