for I Met You at the Coffee Shop5/29/2007 c1 
2AphroDiane
I thought it was cute. It sounds like you have a very rythmic style to your writing. That's pretty cool if you ask me.
I enjoy being able to visualize things exactly the way they are intended, though, so maybe next time you could add a little bit more detail to the story.
All in all, however...
Terrific!
2AphroDianeI thought it was cute. It sounds like you have a very rythmic style to your writing. That's pretty cool if you ask me.
I enjoy being able to visualize things exactly the way they are intended, though, so maybe next time you could add a little bit more detail to the story.
All in all, however...
Terrific!
3/7/2007 c1 1AnnaMarie H
I loved this! It was so good. I was saved about when I was seven, this is one of the best stories I have ever read!
1AnnaMarie HI loved this! It was so good. I was saved about when I was seven, this is one of the best stories I have ever read!
3/1/2007 c1 1barelyamiable
Ohh, so sweet.
I loved this.
And really has encouraged me.
Encouraged me to go out there and witness.
And not to act like the snotty superiors they think we are.
:)
Thank you and may God bless you.
x33
1barelyamiableOhh, so sweet.
I loved this.
And really has encouraged me.
Encouraged me to go out there and witness.
And not to act like the snotty superiors they think we are.
:)
Thank you and may God bless you.
x33
3/1/2007 c1 60Navagan
Interesting idea...
However I feel that you might want to have a less demanding approach...
I personally, am agnostic, and although there is a definition of it, I have created my own thesis on it. It basically follows these lines:
There may or may not be a higher power. Either way this higher power is not a human form, if anything, it's more of a mist-like substance, that everything has somehow sprung from.
I don't believe in Jesus as being "God's" son. I believe he was one man who shared a belief with many other people, and he just happened to be the one who people remembered, and gave a name. I figure that there must be aliens out there(I mean, sheesh, the universe is huge!), and it's just not fair to believe that there is one presiding essence. It's simply not plausable to me.
This, of course, is just my own personal belief system. I read your story for curiosity's sake.
I think your story is interesting and I suppose it represents a part of you, but honestly, I prefer to put beliefs aside. Your story seems very Jesus-based. I think you need to focus more on yourself. I already understand you love Jesus. Now tell me something that ten million other people in the world don't agree with. What makes you you? Maybe a little more on how exactly you understand the world, and maybe less on convincing people of what you believe or spreading the "love."
-Please don't take this in a bad way. I'm happy to discuss whatever you would like. This review is written purely for critique. I am not trying to influence, destroy, negate, or otherwise demean your beliefs or who you are, and I hope you can recognize that.-
Thanks for listening!
Cheers!
60NavaganInteresting idea...
However I feel that you might want to have a less demanding approach...
I personally, am agnostic, and although there is a definition of it, I have created my own thesis on it. It basically follows these lines:
There may or may not be a higher power. Either way this higher power is not a human form, if anything, it's more of a mist-like substance, that everything has somehow sprung from.
I don't believe in Jesus as being "God's" son. I believe he was one man who shared a belief with many other people, and he just happened to be the one who people remembered, and gave a name. I figure that there must be aliens out there(I mean, sheesh, the universe is huge!), and it's just not fair to believe that there is one presiding essence. It's simply not plausable to me.
This, of course, is just my own personal belief system. I read your story for curiosity's sake.
I think your story is interesting and I suppose it represents a part of you, but honestly, I prefer to put beliefs aside. Your story seems very Jesus-based. I think you need to focus more on yourself. I already understand you love Jesus. Now tell me something that ten million other people in the world don't agree with. What makes you you? Maybe a little more on how exactly you understand the world, and maybe less on convincing people of what you believe or spreading the "love."
-Please don't take this in a bad way. I'm happy to discuss whatever you would like. This review is written purely for critique. I am not trying to influence, destroy, negate, or otherwise demean your beliefs or who you are, and I hope you can recognize that.-
Thanks for listening!
Cheers!