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3/15/2007 c1 46antigonelives
"When you here music too loud for your ears" - should be "hear." Also, in the second line, there should be a comma after "beware."

There are so many poems about slitting wrists on here that I just can't take them seriously... but if this is really how you feel, I hope you're just getting your pain out and not acting on any self-harmful impulse.

Back to the poem... rhymes are decent but they seem forced. That's the only way to describe it, like they don't belong here. This poem would work much better as a freeverse, even though it sort of is one already.

The last stanza? Don't even get me started.
3/15/2007 c1 youaretheeverlastingGod
there are many other ways to let out stress and anger. without cutting yourself.

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