for Math Class5/27/2007 c6 
8nostalgicEXPLOSION
Don't know what to say, but wow.
Raw emotion-and I know it's for real.
Good way to put your whole situation into words.
P.S.
I'm sorry.
8nostalgicEXPLOSIONDon't know what to say, but wow.
Raw emotion-and I know it's for real.
Good way to put your whole situation into words.
P.S.
I'm sorry.
3/10/2007 c3 nostalgicEXPLOSION
The last two chapters clears up how you feel about Glue and what you see in him. I like how you explain what his eyes say. But I have to admit, he's an ass at times.
Pst.
I'm not asking you to promise anything. A promise is a broken lie in itself. I just want you to know that I care.
The last two chapters clears up how you feel about Glue and what you see in him. I like how you explain what his eyes say. But I have to admit, he's an ass at times.
Pst.
I'm not asking you to promise anything. A promise is a broken lie in itself. I just want you to know that I care.
3/4/2007 c1 6Onion Ring
Whoa whoa... you wrote this in a very hasty manner... i can see. You need to use paragraphs... so it does not look like one big chunk... there are many grammar errors, like before the contraction "but," you're supposed to use a comma. Numbers should be spelt out if they're easy to spell, like three. Dialogue would be cool. I think you should edit this before you continue... that's just my advice though. it'd make it easier for others to read.
6Onion RingWhoa whoa... you wrote this in a very hasty manner... i can see. You need to use paragraphs... so it does not look like one big chunk... there are many grammar errors, like before the contraction "but," you're supposed to use a comma. Numbers should be spelt out if they're easy to spell, like three. Dialogue would be cool. I think you should edit this before you continue... that's just my advice though. it'd make it easier for others to read.
3/3/2007 c1 8nostalgicEXPLOSION
Lovely.
I can feel the anger and the revulsion in this piece. You brought the paralysis of madness into this piece. I like that.
I can never get anger down on my pieces I work on. Mine are usually angsty. But then again, I am an angst-whore after all. Kekekeke.
Nice piece. I'm glad that you took out your anger in writing here.
Continue writing, Jaki.
8nostalgicEXPLOSIONLovely.
I can feel the anger and the revulsion in this piece. You brought the paralysis of madness into this piece. I like that.
I can never get anger down on my pieces I work on. Mine are usually angsty. But then again, I am an angst-whore after all. Kekekeke.
Nice piece. I'm glad that you took out your anger in writing here.
Continue writing, Jaki.