for Water3/30/2007 c1 
174a silenced revolution
I love the metaphor, and the "itsaddingup itsaddingup".
I, too, adore the last two lines.
Good work.
174a silenced revolutionI love the metaphor, and the "itsaddingup itsaddingup".
I, too, adore the last two lines.
Good work.
3/8/2007 c1 zz00
Nice. The italic lines really make time feel as ephemeral as water. Nice metaphor at the end; gives the impression of someone who's too afraid to act. And thanks for the review.
Nice. The italic lines really make time feel as ephemeral as water. Nice metaphor at the end; gives the impression of someone who's too afraid to act. And thanks for the review.
3/7/2007 c1 polka dots and addictions
LOVE the last two lines, & this begins with a gorgeous comparison & its been extended well.nicely written. ~Bex xx
LOVE the last two lines, & this begins with a gorgeous comparison & its been extended well.nicely written. ~Bex xx