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7/24/2007 c1 alirider827
i really liked the tone of voice you had with this poem. at first glance, i thought for sure you would have a poem relying way too much on rhyme to carry it. but instead, it was a nice, relaxing beat.

the one thing i would have to comment on is your lack of punctuation. i think it's your writing style to not have punctuation and use lines for breaks, but it sort of causes the reader to read the poem choppily, which detracts from the flow of it.

all in all, it was very nice. i liked it, especially the voice, which seems all very natural. nice job =)
7/14/2007 c1 68this is britt
a lot of the stuff on here seems angst-ridden and negative and bleak- but there was something sweet and refreshing about this poem.

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