for Ever Seen a Tomboy Flirt?5/26/2007 c4 
2muryoutaisuu
hey again!
count me as a regular reviewer, since i dont talk much but my rambling on the net makes up for it.
1. Where's David? i'd thought he would be with qwen and the others.
2. there's a lot of scenes with trev and qwen, is there more than the obvious pairing? [dont have to answer this one if plot should be revealed.]
3. ...umm. i dont have a three.
maybe for next chapter!
2muryoutaisuuhey again!
count me as a regular reviewer, since i dont talk much but my rambling on the net makes up for it.
1. Where's David? i'd thought he would be with qwen and the others.
2. there's a lot of scenes with trev and qwen, is there more than the obvious pairing? [dont have to answer this one if plot should be revealed.]
3. ...umm. i dont have a three.
maybe for next chapter!
5/24/2007 c4 19ihrtbks
She's going girl. *scream, shriek* So she slept with Trev. Poor toilet, I think.
UPDATE SOON!
19ihrtbksShe's going girl. *scream, shriek* So she slept with Trev. Poor toilet, I think.
UPDATE SOON!
5/24/2007 c2 3Un-Corked
So far I like the story, but yeah, the last paragraph was too fast paced. I think you should have built the kiss up with more intense awkwardness so it would have been more climactic.
3Un-CorkedSo far I like the story, but yeah, the last paragraph was too fast paced. I think you should have built the kiss up with more intense awkwardness so it would have been more climactic.
5/21/2007 c3 19ihrtbks
Nice so far; fast pacing is okay, but it is a little random...you go from sprained ankle to stealing waterskis. Still can't figure out if 'he' is David or Trev. I'm rootin for David...don't know why, but that's beside the point.
UPDATE SOON!
19ihrtbksNice so far; fast pacing is okay, but it is a little random...you go from sprained ankle to stealing waterskis. Still can't figure out if 'he' is David or Trev. I'm rootin for David...don't know why, but that's beside the point.
UPDATE SOON!
5/21/2007 c3 3ForgottenSmiles
I'm liking this story so far. The names are a little confusing, but it's pretty funny. Update soon!
3ForgottenSmilesI'm liking this story so far. The names are a little confusing, but it's pretty funny. Update soon!
3/19/2007 c2 2muryoutaisuu
hey again.
it was a bit fast...i couldnt follow who trev was...brother or another friend? and the part where she fell and crack her head (sorta) i had to read further to where she blamed david for everything, that i realised he was the one who caused it.
it's a bit confusing but i like how it's coming along. especially the kiss at the end original.
looking forward to more description in the next chapter cause not really seeing her as a tomboy so far.
and yeah. update soon!
cya.
muryoutaisuu. ^^"
2muryoutaisuuhey again.
it was a bit fast...i couldnt follow who trev was...brother or another friend? and the part where she fell and crack her head (sorta) i had to read further to where she blamed david for everything, that i realised he was the one who caused it.
it's a bit confusing but i like how it's coming along. especially the kiss at the end original.
looking forward to more description in the next chapter cause not really seeing her as a tomboy so far.
and yeah. update soon!
cya.
muryoutaisuu. ^^"
3/18/2007 c2 teardropsONroses
very very good. I like it alot. umm, I don't know that much spanish and I had to get a frien to translate, but what does that mean, exactly?
very very good. I like it alot. umm, I don't know that much spanish and I had to get a frien to translate, but what does that mean, exactly?
3/11/2007 c1 muryoutaisuu
hey. nice start. very interesting. though not a lot of description of the two characters. but look forward to how this story play out.
glad to see there's one more story about tomboy-s in this place. if ya haven't noticed i rather like tomboy based stories and a tomboy myself.
hope to read more soon.
cya.
muryoutaisuu.
first reviewer - ^^"
hey. nice start. very interesting. though not a lot of description of the two characters. but look forward to how this story play out.
glad to see there's one more story about tomboy-s in this place. if ya haven't noticed i rather like tomboy based stories and a tomboy myself.
hope to read more soon.
cya.
muryoutaisuu.
first reviewer - ^^"