for Infinitive3/7/2009 c1 
78Peter Harrison
Wow, that was just... A lot of epic in so short a space!
Great Job fellow Harrison
78Peter HarrisonWow, that was just... A lot of epic in so short a space!
Great Job fellow Harrison
10/1/2007 c1 96SedateOperateCREMATE
I'm going to review. This poem. I like patterns. That are pointless. Like when you knit me a sandwich. I like yield signs. In my mind. They are cool never amounting to anything. Sometimes I like to cascade down the mountain upon the chest and maybe the back, but not the flesh. I like when my horses oversee the shed made from my blood. I like it when my fingers are made of cake. There you go.
96SedateOperateCREMATEI'm going to review. This poem. I like patterns. That are pointless. Like when you knit me a sandwich. I like yield signs. In my mind. They are cool never amounting to anything. Sometimes I like to cascade down the mountain upon the chest and maybe the back, but not the flesh. I like when my horses oversee the shed made from my blood. I like it when my fingers are made of cake. There you go.
3/28/2007 c1 9stalkerlesson101
You did one thing almost no one does anymore, you used an unbelievable vocabulary! I loved that aspect! I did think they poem ended a bit abruptly and the imagrey was a bit obscure. i got a bit lost the first time but when i reread it i got it. good but complex,not for everybody but i enjoyed it! good job!
~rach
9stalkerlesson101You did one thing almost no one does anymore, you used an unbelievable vocabulary! I loved that aspect! I did think they poem ended a bit abruptly and the imagrey was a bit obscure. i got a bit lost the first time but when i reread it i got it. good but complex,not for everybody but i enjoyed it! good job!
~rach
3/13/2007 c1 13herpius derpius7
Ooh, this was great: the imagery, the feel of it...
"Today... / Infinity ends."
That was really nice, right there, as well as:
"Grease caked fingers / Extending to the water / Reaching for unattainable sterility."
Brilliant.
13herpius derpius7Ooh, this was great: the imagery, the feel of it...
"Today... / Infinity ends."
That was really nice, right there, as well as:
"Grease caked fingers / Extending to the water / Reaching for unattainable sterility."
Brilliant.
3/13/2007 c1 5Katy Gilchrist
This is brilliant. Thre is exelent use of imargary. I just won a speech competion about waar, i'm going to Paris etc for it and this poem was better than half of the other entrees.
WELL DONE!
Katy
5Katy GilchristThis is brilliant. Thre is exelent use of imargary. I just won a speech competion about waar, i'm going to Paris etc for it and this poem was better than half of the other entrees.
WELL DONE!
Katy
3/12/2007 c1 11xDancingintheRainx
Very well written. You did an excellent job with this piece. The imagery is very strong; as is the emotion. Great job!
11xDancingintheRainxVery well written. You did an excellent job with this piece. The imagery is very strong; as is the emotion. Great job!