for Splits10/11/2007 c6 
11Jessiquie
Pretty sure lots of ppl are still reading. plots great and i love the characters. Great chapter!
11JessiquiePretty sure lots of ppl are still reading. plots great and i love the characters. Great chapter!
10/11/2007 c5 Jessiquie
Oh no!
and btw I got all that (the first paragraph in your A/N) from the chapter, so don't worry.
Oh no!
and btw I got all that (the first paragraph in your A/N) from the chapter, so don't worry.
10/11/2007 c3 Jessiquie
aww... but Noah's so nice. What has she got against them so much... I mean i don't Like them much myself, they lie too much. But his being so sweet!
aww... but Noah's so nice. What has she got against them so much... I mean i don't Like them much myself, they lie too much. But his being so sweet!
10/11/2007 c1 Jessiquie
Holy crap this is awsome! i Absoutely love it. Noah seems so much like Logan from Gilmore girls and as I loved him, I absoutely love Noah too!
This story, or what I have read of it so far, its so good! Defiantely adding it to my fave list.
Holy crap this is awsome! i Absoutely love it. Noah seems so much like Logan from Gilmore girls and as I loved him, I absoutely love Noah too!
This story, or what I have read of it so far, its so good! Defiantely adding it to my fave list.
10/10/2007 c10 13bitobroadway
You should continue to keep writing...
I'm hooked.
So get going.
It's truly a lovely story so far.
13bitobroadwayYou should continue to keep writing...
I'm hooked.
So get going.
It's truly a lovely story so far.
10/10/2007 c1 lenora87
Hey ! ^_^ i love your story with all its little specific details from its politics, dance and jewish backround. Just a critic tho in chapter one you wrote "My uncle is Joseph Linnburg", then in chapter four you wrote "noah did not awe me but his father, Senator Daniel Linnburg, made my palms sweaty" and through out chapter 4 Noahs father is named Daniel. Yet in chapter 10 you call Noahs father Joseph "You should probably call my father Joseph..", so just that detail in Noah father name is inconsistent, is confusing. Just a critic if you be more consistent, your writing will greatly help and make your story more believeble. but either then that it seems like you know exaclty where you want to go with the story so keep up the good work. :)
Hey ! ^_^ i love your story with all its little specific details from its politics, dance and jewish backround. Just a critic tho in chapter one you wrote "My uncle is Joseph Linnburg", then in chapter four you wrote "noah did not awe me but his father, Senator Daniel Linnburg, made my palms sweaty" and through out chapter 4 Noahs father is named Daniel. Yet in chapter 10 you call Noahs father Joseph "You should probably call my father Joseph..", so just that detail in Noah father name is inconsistent, is confusing. Just a critic if you be more consistent, your writing will greatly help and make your story more believeble. but either then that it seems like you know exaclty where you want to go with the story so keep up the good work. :)
10/9/2007 c10 3I Quoth Nevermore
I love how you write. Every conversation has a point. Like, there are no usless and pointless conversations going around. That's a sign of a good writer in my book. Update soon!
3I Quoth NevermoreI love how you write. Every conversation has a point. Like, there are no usless and pointless conversations going around. That's a sign of a good writer in my book. Update soon!
10/9/2007 c10 8Lethe's Oblivion
...Politics just screw with my head. I will never understand them, hence, I'm a little lost in all the little games they're playing, but I love the story anyway. I hope you update again soon.
8Lethe's Oblivion...Politics just screw with my head. I will never understand them, hence, I'm a little lost in all the little games they're playing, but I love the story anyway. I hope you update again soon.
10/9/2007 c10 3phelps112
so another good friend added to the mix. she's just showing noah up everywhere, and not on purpose. so when is she going to relax and let noah in? Or realize that she has feelings for him as well.
3phelps112so another good friend added to the mix. she's just showing noah up everywhere, and not on purpose. so when is she going to relax and let noah in? Or realize that she has feelings for him as well.
10/9/2007 c10 3Michelle Richard
I really like this story. I can't wait to see what the next chapter brings. I especially appreciate the fact that you seem so knowledgable in the areas that you are writing about. Case in point, when you speak of politically things. Good job!
3Michelle RichardI really like this story. I can't wait to see what the next chapter brings. I especially appreciate the fact that you seem so knowledgable in the areas that you are writing about. Case in point, when you speak of politically things. Good job!
10/9/2007 c10 Essie
I enjoy reading this story but don't really have anything to comment. So keep writing and I'll keep reading!
I enjoy reading this story but don't really have anything to comment. So keep writing and I'll keep reading!
9/17/2007 c9 3I Quoth Nevermore
Great chapter. That's a twist: Lisa wanting to learn pointe. Who would be her partner? She wouldn't steal Noah, would she? Nah, I hope not. Update soon!
3I Quoth NevermoreGreat chapter. That's a twist: Lisa wanting to learn pointe. Who would be her partner? She wouldn't steal Noah, would she? Nah, I hope not. Update soon!
9/17/2007 c9 Yukiko-snowchild
i like your story so much! You have the right way of expressing dancing without over complicating things so that non-dancers can understand without having a dance background. The relation ship between Ruth and Noah is amazing! keep up the good work! :)
i like your story so much! You have the right way of expressing dancing without over complicating things so that non-dancers can understand without having a dance background. The relation ship between Ruth and Noah is amazing! keep up the good work! :)
8/8/2007 c7 Ally
This story is so different from any of the other stories on this site (in a good way). It's original and there is substantial character and plot development. It's interesting to read a story where its not focused primarily on the romance aspect.
One idea might be the further development of the other characters in the story such as Noah's friends and Ruth's friends. You don't have to go into too much depth, but some explanation of why they act the way they do would be good. It would give us an idea of the motivations that drive them and make their actions seem less random.
You're doing a great job with the story so keep up the good work. I look forward to reading more in the future!
This story is so different from any of the other stories on this site (in a good way). It's original and there is substantial character and plot development. It's interesting to read a story where its not focused primarily on the romance aspect.
One idea might be the further development of the other characters in the story such as Noah's friends and Ruth's friends. You don't have to go into too much depth, but some explanation of why they act the way they do would be good. It would give us an idea of the motivations that drive them and make their actions seem less random.
You're doing a great job with the story so keep up the good work. I look forward to reading more in the future!