for Splits9/6/2008 c19 
3I Quoth Nevermore
Woah woah woah-hold up. Those two words just KILLED me. "She fled." So, what? She ran from him, literally? WHAT! Not cool, Ro. Not cool. Well, I suppose it's for the good of the plot. Update soon!
3I Quoth NevermoreWoah woah woah-hold up. Those two words just KILLED me. "She fled." So, what? She ran from him, literally? WHAT! Not cool, Ro. Not cool. Well, I suppose it's for the good of the plot. Update soon!
9/4/2008 c19 11Jessiquie
Yay new chapter! and holy hell for the ending! and sort of a cliff hanger!
I can't wait to read more! there so cute, even if that is a massive bomb shell to pull on their first offical date!
Update soonish!
Jess
11JessiquieYay new chapter! and holy hell for the ending! and sort of a cliff hanger!
I can't wait to read more! there so cute, even if that is a massive bomb shell to pull on their first offical date!
Update soonish!
Jess
7/1/2008 c18 Jessiquie
Hey.
You have no idea how happy i was and excited when i saw the email saying a new chapter of this story. Its one of my all time faves, and while you may not be a published author in terms of this story being in a paperbook, I absoutely adore it and rank it up there! Seriously, when my mates, who asks me all the time, which stories/books i like, I also refer to this one as well! I even told her to read it, and she told her sister to read it! lol! :)
Anywyas sorry to have use not my logged in account, but since you redid this chapter i can't review it as per my signed in acocunt cuz i already have reviewed chapter 18 (Accoutn via same name). Anyways. I really like the changes to this chapter you made and how you extended it. It works well and solves problems from before. I.e. Noah's hyperventing :)
Poor Ruth! She seriosuly has no clue! Please tell me that he really didn't ask her out because she may have brought it up. Pretty sure he didn't due to hand holding and all, but still!
Still my fave story! Loved a millions! Update soon! Can't wait for more!
Jessiquie
Hey.
You have no idea how happy i was and excited when i saw the email saying a new chapter of this story. Its one of my all time faves, and while you may not be a published author in terms of this story being in a paperbook, I absoutely adore it and rank it up there! Seriously, when my mates, who asks me all the time, which stories/books i like, I also refer to this one as well! I even told her to read it, and she told her sister to read it! lol! :)
Anywyas sorry to have use not my logged in account, but since you redid this chapter i can't review it as per my signed in acocunt cuz i already have reviewed chapter 18 (Accoutn via same name). Anyways. I really like the changes to this chapter you made and how you extended it. It works well and solves problems from before. I.e. Noah's hyperventing :)
Poor Ruth! She seriosuly has no clue! Please tell me that he really didn't ask her out because she may have brought it up. Pretty sure he didn't due to hand holding and all, but still!
Still my fave story! Loved a millions! Update soon! Can't wait for more!
Jessiquie
5/26/2008 c17 3Cinnia Aine
I like how the story is moving along. The grammar/spelling mistakes don't bother me at all. This story is a definite favorite of mine. :)
3Cinnia AineI like how the story is moving along. The grammar/spelling mistakes don't bother me at all. This story is a definite favorite of mine. :)
5/5/2008 c8 Colleen
I just found your story and I love it, but there a few mistakes I noticed right away while reading thig chapter.
-“Quickly, Kerida, I have something to show you,"
Unless Kerida is a Jewish endearment, I think you mean 'querida' which means 'dear' in Spanish.
-"Not everyone can have such a roll model"
It should be role, not roll.
- “See you then.”
“Nona!”
This isn't so much a mistake as it is confusing. You should add a line in explaining Ruth said that after getting the phone.
These aren't all the mistakes, but I wasn't really looking for mistakes.
I hope this helps!
I just found your story and I love it, but there a few mistakes I noticed right away while reading thig chapter.
-“Quickly, Kerida, I have something to show you,"
Unless Kerida is a Jewish endearment, I think you mean 'querida' which means 'dear' in Spanish.
-"Not everyone can have such a roll model"
It should be role, not roll.
- “See you then.”
“Nona!”
This isn't so much a mistake as it is confusing. You should add a line in explaining Ruth said that after getting the phone.
These aren't all the mistakes, but I wasn't really looking for mistakes.
I hope this helps!
4/10/2008 c18 3I Quoth Nevermore
fantabulous! I liked this, even if it was short. What's with Noah hyperventilating? That's odd, and quirky, so it makes for a good character. Anyways, love this, so update soon!
3I Quoth Nevermorefantabulous! I liked this, even if it was short. What's with Noah hyperventilating? That's odd, and quirky, so it makes for a good character. Anyways, love this, so update soon!
4/10/2008 c18 3M.Bianca
you know, Jacob Kirshenbaum actually means "Jacob Cherry Tree" :)
hurry up with the next one, would you?
3M.Biancayou know, Jacob Kirshenbaum actually means "Jacob Cherry Tree" :)
hurry up with the next one, would you?
4/7/2008 c18 11Jessiquie
ohh awkward tension. Thats so cute... anf finally there going on a date.
But he doesn't really seem as though he really wants to go on a date? did she really force him to? And whats with his little panic attack? he doesn't panic. Either way interesting turn of events.
Can't wait to read more! thanks for the quick update!
11Jessiquieohh awkward tension. Thats so cute... anf finally there going on a date.
But he doesn't really seem as though he really wants to go on a date? did she really force him to? And whats with his little panic attack? he doesn't panic. Either way interesting turn of events.
Can't wait to read more! thanks for the quick update!
4/7/2008 c16 8The Wind Charmer
by the way, and this is for chapter 18, do you take ballet? cause i was wondering why you know so much about it.
is ballet hard, and what are point shoes?
oh, and am i the 100th review? just asking.
laterz,
TWC
PS: Please review my story.
8The Wind Charmerby the way, and this is for chapter 18, do you take ballet? cause i was wondering why you know so much about it.
is ballet hard, and what are point shoes?
oh, and am i the 100th review? just asking.
laterz,
TWC
PS: Please review my story.
4/7/2008 c18 The Wind Charmer
did she force him to ask her out? i mean, it was either that or he was playing hard to get. can guys even play hard to get? i thought that was a girl thing.
did she force him to ask her out? i mean, it was either that or he was playing hard to get. can guys even play hard to get? i thought that was a girl thing.