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5/26/2006 c1 Viper
wow this is a great story! PLEASE UPDATE! AND EMAIL ME TOO WHEN IT IS UPDATED PLEASE! LOVE THE STORY!
7/11/2005 c2 6dreaming-angel15
I really love this story. Please Update.:)
4/10/2005 c2 3illegal22
Wow, nice way to end the chapter. I really liked the story, although a lot of the events were sudden. Keep going! :)
10/19/2004 c1 7Lyarah
Hey, Interesting so far! Could you give an approximate of their ages? Thanks :P
9/11/2004 c2 James Lee
you start this story again!
11/26/2003 c2 33charcoal wings
oh!realy really good. keep writing! please!
7/12/2003 c2 Too lazy to log in Username A-wolf-called-Skya
i like how your doing the story and all... But here's a few suggestions...

1. Try to lengthen the chapters a bit. It might have been two pages long on the word processor, but it is very short.

2.slow down the story a tinge. You really sped along on the first chapter it seemed.

3. What do Jocelyn and Carmen look like?

4. What season is it? (i think you answered that one) where were the mother and daughter before starting back home?Say something about the line of snow covered buildings lining the street.

Otherwise, quite good, but it would be way better if you polished it up to its standards.

:Every legend leaves a mark:
5/23/2003 c2 30quietdrama22
wow... um... *loss of words*... update soon, please. : |
4/8/2001 c1 can't wait
good story ! i can't wait till the next chapter
3/25/2001 c2 70Megan
Ah, insane psycho killers... Gosh Darn them all to Hey!
3/25/2001 c1 Megan
Definitely kept my interest during this entire chapter. Your character's were believable and had some very human traits that you don't see very often in stories (ie. twirling your hair into knots while you wait). Very very good.

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