for Cerulean Harbor4/16/2007 c9 
12sunflowersing
YAY! Now we are getting somewhere with the Derek-Madison relationship! Sorry, no time for a long review. I'm actually supposed to be doing homework... :-/ Anyway, I'll be back to reading your story next Monday! :-D
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12sunflowersingYAY! Now we are getting somewhere with the Derek-Madison relationship! Sorry, no time for a long review. I'm actually supposed to be doing homework... :-/ Anyway, I'll be back to reading your story next Monday! :-D
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4/16/2007 c1 14Rhunt
To CocoLacroix:
1. It has always been within Madison's character to not show Thomas any fear. She didn't run from him like she didn't run from him in the quad that day, because she doesn't want him to know she is afraid. I don't think she expected him to start choking her or attempt to rape her.
How can one scream out or plea when they are being choked? That is physically impossible. She grasped at his hands and tried to kick his groin to try and stop him. Also, who would have helped her? She was in a secluded area and the students weren't exactly helping her when he pushed her down in the quad.
2. His friends: It depends on the situation of how they react. I am going to take a wild guess and say you are referring to Arion and Aries who are conspiring against him. Many friends play jokes on eachother, I don't see anything out of character for the twins to try to "get him back" so to speak for problems they've had with him but without him knowing. I really don't see any situations where any of the friends have been purposely cruel to him. They have always tried to help him, be it with some intent of "paying him back" by making him jealous. I disagree that anyone but Arion has ever done anything but attempted to help Darick.
3. As for Darick's response to Madison's fits: It seems that situations are forgotten in that statement and they can't. Once he is beating on Caleb, it wasn't Madison that he hurt. He apologized because he knew that such a thing could be forgiven. The other time he had attacked and scared Madison and he didn't believe that he could be forgiven. The situations dictate his reaction not what Madison has said. He would have done the same had she walked away without a word to him in any of those situations. It's within Darick's character to ignore things people say and decide that he either doesn't believe it or he doesn't care.
4. Not listening to Madison: Darick won't care. He wants what he wants when he wants it. People don't always get their way or get their point listen to because they throw a hissy fit or hit someone.
I'm afraid that although your post was insightful, I disagree that anyone acted unnaturally or out of character. I tried to view your statements outside my "this is mine and I love it no matter what people say" world. I tried to be unbiased, but I'm afraid that I just disagree.I think that every reaction was within the character's limits/personality and rightly justified by human behavior.
I hope you do not think me any more rude than I thought you in your post, which was not at all. Thank you for your comment and your obvious care for my writings. I couldn't respond well to your posts about his friends, because I don't really know what situations you are thinking of. Again, thank you for your response.
14RhuntTo CocoLacroix:
1. It has always been within Madison's character to not show Thomas any fear. She didn't run from him like she didn't run from him in the quad that day, because she doesn't want him to know she is afraid. I don't think she expected him to start choking her or attempt to rape her.
How can one scream out or plea when they are being choked? That is physically impossible. She grasped at his hands and tried to kick his groin to try and stop him. Also, who would have helped her? She was in a secluded area and the students weren't exactly helping her when he pushed her down in the quad.
2. His friends: It depends on the situation of how they react. I am going to take a wild guess and say you are referring to Arion and Aries who are conspiring against him. Many friends play jokes on eachother, I don't see anything out of character for the twins to try to "get him back" so to speak for problems they've had with him but without him knowing. I really don't see any situations where any of the friends have been purposely cruel to him. They have always tried to help him, be it with some intent of "paying him back" by making him jealous. I disagree that anyone but Arion has ever done anything but attempted to help Darick.
3. As for Darick's response to Madison's fits: It seems that situations are forgotten in that statement and they can't. Once he is beating on Caleb, it wasn't Madison that he hurt. He apologized because he knew that such a thing could be forgiven. The other time he had attacked and scared Madison and he didn't believe that he could be forgiven. The situations dictate his reaction not what Madison has said. He would have done the same had she walked away without a word to him in any of those situations. It's within Darick's character to ignore things people say and decide that he either doesn't believe it or he doesn't care.
4. Not listening to Madison: Darick won't care. He wants what he wants when he wants it. People don't always get their way or get their point listen to because they throw a hissy fit or hit someone.
I'm afraid that although your post was insightful, I disagree that anyone acted unnaturally or out of character. I tried to view your statements outside my "this is mine and I love it no matter what people say" world. I tried to be unbiased, but I'm afraid that I just disagree.I think that every reaction was within the character's limits/personality and rightly justified by human behavior.
I hope you do not think me any more rude than I thought you in your post, which was not at all. Thank you for your comment and your obvious care for my writings. I couldn't respond well to your posts about his friends, because I don't really know what situations you are thinking of. Again, thank you for your response.
4/15/2007 c2 CocoLacroix
well i just read his story last night until some ridiculous hour of the morning and i have to say, congratulations on putting out such a huge story in such a short space of time.
i wish i had your talent!
now i know you're a keen writer and i know that this story is going to be huge so i don't feel too afraid that you'll hate me for giving my opinion on it!
at times i've found this story confusing..i think the unpredictability of the characters has been what kept me reading.
but i find the characters unrelatable and sometimes unrealistic. i find madison's reactions to situations a little bizaar- like the natural reaction to someone trying to choke you/rape you/hurt you would be to scream or cry or plead - none of which she does. the only really normal reaction i think she had was to smile at darick's job offer.
i also am confused by the contradictory reactions of other characters...one minute daricks friends are looking out for him, next they're not or conspiring to do something questionable to his relationship with madison.
one that confused me in particular was when madison would yell/lecture darick to stay away from her or to stop bothering her or to stay out of her life or tell him that she hated him and each time that she did this he would react differently to essentially the same rant he'd heard 5 or 6 times previously. i didn't understand why one time he was dumbfounded, another time he completely ignored her and another time where he went into a sort of denial. it bothers me to see this because i feel like it diminishes madison as one would think that yelling and screaming and slapping someone would be the best way to get your point across and yet when she does it's not clear if anyone will care that she's even spoken.
i understand that these features might be part of the characters' behaviour but i still can't help but feel it is a little too inconsistent with real emotional reactions of real people.
now that i have said all this, i want you to know that i do like this story, and as befuddled as i am by some of it, the vast majority i have really enjoyed reading. i really look forward to reading more and i hope that nothing i said has offended you.
(also this isn't just a one sided thing, i know you must be busy actually writing this massive fic but if you have the time i'd love if you could clear up any of the things i mentioned.)
so keep up the good work, you really are doing a great job.
au revoir!
well i just read his story last night until some ridiculous hour of the morning and i have to say, congratulations on putting out such a huge story in such a short space of time.
i wish i had your talent!
now i know you're a keen writer and i know that this story is going to be huge so i don't feel too afraid that you'll hate me for giving my opinion on it!
at times i've found this story confusing..i think the unpredictability of the characters has been what kept me reading.
but i find the characters unrelatable and sometimes unrealistic. i find madison's reactions to situations a little bizaar- like the natural reaction to someone trying to choke you/rape you/hurt you would be to scream or cry or plead - none of which she does. the only really normal reaction i think she had was to smile at darick's job offer.
i also am confused by the contradictory reactions of other characters...one minute daricks friends are looking out for him, next they're not or conspiring to do something questionable to his relationship with madison.
one that confused me in particular was when madison would yell/lecture darick to stay away from her or to stop bothering her or to stay out of her life or tell him that she hated him and each time that she did this he would react differently to essentially the same rant he'd heard 5 or 6 times previously. i didn't understand why one time he was dumbfounded, another time he completely ignored her and another time where he went into a sort of denial. it bothers me to see this because i feel like it diminishes madison as one would think that yelling and screaming and slapping someone would be the best way to get your point across and yet when she does it's not clear if anyone will care that she's even spoken.
i understand that these features might be part of the characters' behaviour but i still can't help but feel it is a little too inconsistent with real emotional reactions of real people.
now that i have said all this, i want you to know that i do like this story, and as befuddled as i am by some of it, the vast majority i have really enjoyed reading. i really look forward to reading more and i hope that nothing i said has offended you.
(also this isn't just a one sided thing, i know you must be busy actually writing this massive fic but if you have the time i'd love if you could clear up any of the things i mentioned.)
so keep up the good work, you really are doing a great job.
au revoir!
4/11/2007 c7 3XThexDeviotX
holy hell I love you.
Ah, this is the first good story I've read in a really long time.
3XThexDeviotXholy hell I love you.
Ah, this is the first good story I've read in a really long time.
4/10/2007 c8 3Darkest Dream
aww..
gorgeous..
I went to your forum and saw Madison's dress..
I love Darick even if some doesn't..
Your story reminds me of Meteor Garden or Hana Yori Dango..
well, again.. your story ROCKS!
\m/..
and Darick's engaged to who?
can't wait for the next chapter!
:D
3Darkest Dreamaww..
gorgeous..
I went to your forum and saw Madison's dress..
I love Darick even if some doesn't..
Your story reminds me of Meteor Garden or Hana Yori Dango..
well, again.. your story ROCKS!
\m/..
and Darick's engaged to who?
can't wait for the next chapter!
:D
4/9/2007 c8 w0lfgangx
I really dont like Derick. He's such an overgrown spoiled little child, and he doesn't seem to understand the word no. Although it is nice that he is trying to make it up to her, he still isn't right for her. I think she connects best with Arion. She should give HIM a chance.
I really dont like Derick. He's such an overgrown spoiled little child, and he doesn't seem to understand the word no. Although it is nice that he is trying to make it up to her, he still isn't right for her. I think she connects best with Arion. She should give HIM a chance.
4/9/2007 c8 12sunflowersing
This is going to be an informal review, meaning no fancy words, probably because I'm lazy and its spring break. Anyway, this story makes me so cofused. I don't know who to like. Arion, Derik, Alan? AH! maybe Caleb will even be a match for Madison. I can't believe Brianna would do that to Caleb. And she KNOWS that Brad is giving her a FRIGGIN' TIME LIMIT! What kind of BS is that? Asshole! I'm proud of Maddison for hitting Brianna, she deserved it. But Brianna still stuck up for her, which suprised but pleased me at the same time. Looks like Brianna has Brad wrapped around her little finger... for now. Seems like Madison is starting to like Alan in a way more than siblings. Its all so confusing. This story is messing with my emotions. I would be so confused if I were Madison. If I were here I might just give up on relationships all together... too much of a pain in the ass, if you ask me. but you didn't (ask me). Derek is starting to turn his ways around which is surprising, and Madison is noticing it too. It makes me all warm and fuzzy inside to know that he MIGHT be changing for the better. Well, we will just have to see, now wont we? Okay. Now this review is turning more into a chapter summary, but I don't have the heart to delete it. So now I put an end to my review/chapter summary (crappy summary at that).
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12sunflowersingThis is going to be an informal review, meaning no fancy words, probably because I'm lazy and its spring break. Anyway, this story makes me so cofused. I don't know who to like. Arion, Derik, Alan? AH! maybe Caleb will even be a match for Madison. I can't believe Brianna would do that to Caleb. And she KNOWS that Brad is giving her a FRIGGIN' TIME LIMIT! What kind of BS is that? Asshole! I'm proud of Maddison for hitting Brianna, she deserved it. But Brianna still stuck up for her, which suprised but pleased me at the same time. Looks like Brianna has Brad wrapped around her little finger... for now. Seems like Madison is starting to like Alan in a way more than siblings. Its all so confusing. This story is messing with my emotions. I would be so confused if I were Madison. If I were here I might just give up on relationships all together... too much of a pain in the ass, if you ask me. but you didn't (ask me). Derek is starting to turn his ways around which is surprising, and Madison is noticing it too. It makes me all warm and fuzzy inside to know that he MIGHT be changing for the better. Well, we will just have to see, now wont we? Okay. Now this review is turning more into a chapter summary, but I don't have the heart to delete it. So now I put an end to my review/chapter summary (crappy summary at that).
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4/9/2007 c8 liVe-yOuR-fAntAsy
Ah! Im so happy about this new job of hers now! I can't wait to read more! Update soon!
Ah! Im so happy about this new job of hers now! I can't wait to read more! Update soon!
4/9/2007 c8 2Stang65
AW such a cute ending! Darick is so stuck on Madison. LOVED the long chapter! Especially loved Darick's way of apologizing to her - he finally did something right - MEN!
2Stang65AW such a cute ending! Darick is so stuck on Madison. LOVED the long chapter! Especially loved Darick's way of apologizing to her - he finally did something right - MEN!
4/8/2007 c6 jo
hey, good story so far. Hey just wondering.. have you ever seen ouran highschool host club? Because your characters are very similar to that except its a more serious take on it.
Anyways keep up the good work.
hey, good story so far. Hey just wondering.. have you ever seen ouran highschool host club? Because your characters are very similar to that except its a more serious take on it.
Anyways keep up the good work.
4/6/2007 c7 liVe-yOuR-fAntAsy
Love this story!
I actually like Darick..well i started to when he was chasing Madison and making her laugh in a couple chapters back. that was cute! I want more cute scenes like that! haha. update soon!
Love this story!
I actually like Darick..well i started to when he was chasing Madison and making her laugh in a couple chapters back. that was cute! I want more cute scenes like that! haha. update soon!
4/5/2007 c7 Stang65
MEN! Sometimes they can be such pains! Can't wait for the next update in this saga. You're doing a wonderful job here, hope to see it continue soon.
MEN! Sometimes they can be such pains! Can't wait for the next update in this saga. You're doing a wonderful job here, hope to see it continue soon.
4/5/2007 c7 Melody Faus
Wow, what an amazing story, and the characters are so realistic. This story deserves a lot more reviews. *goes off to publisize*
Keep writing, for my sanity.
Wow, what an amazing story, and the characters are so realistic. This story deserves a lot more reviews. *goes off to publisize*
Keep writing, for my sanity.