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2/11/2009 c1 73An Inside Joke
I like the feel of this piece, although the slightly-sarcastic tone seems to fluctuate between being just right for the story, and a bit over-the-top. The opening felt weak, but once the actual travelling begins, the story becomes very interesting. Toward the end, the tone felt forced again (especially during the discussion of water and alcoholism), but overall, an interesting start so far.
3/20/2007 c1 Denise
This is awesome.

I love the various 'descriptions' of "the cleaner".

"and very good they are too" - you sound like Yoda :-)

"youn Damien" - that you are, my friend, that you are...

I always drink a lot of water when I know I'm going to be drinking and it does seem to help, so your "professional drunk" theory might actually be spot on.

Later!

Denise
3/19/2007 c1 paulthecow
F# hilarious.

Been there, done that, but it appears you have more t-shirts.

Good work fella - looking forward to part 2

xx

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