for Flesh4/25/2007 c1 
871no.peace.los.angeles
This has such an air of power and feminism to it. I don't know if you were intending feminism, but that's what it screamed to me. Which is not to say that that is a bad thing. I really love these pieces that have such a strong voice, and this one really does. Wonderful work. Keep writing! :)
871no.peace.los.angelesThis has such an air of power and feminism to it. I don't know if you were intending feminism, but that's what it screamed to me. Which is not to say that that is a bad thing. I really love these pieces that have such a strong voice, and this one really does. Wonderful work. Keep writing! :)
3/30/2007 c1 31Holly Rose E
this is wonderfully intense. the first stanza is probably the strongest, and has the most meaning behind it. the entire poem, however, is equally strong and it never falters in its speech. it never really grows weaker.
31Holly Rose Ethis is wonderfully intense. the first stanza is probably the strongest, and has the most meaning behind it. the entire poem, however, is equally strong and it never falters in its speech. it never really grows weaker.
3/27/2007 c1 5darknessblooms
I love the brutality of this piece - so physical but so much under the surface, the skin, at the same time. The last stanza has to be my favorite though - it's perfect almost.
"Flesh seems reasonably cheap for the loving I did not want..." - This line caught me and made me go back and reread,. It really stabs the reader with raw emotion, although it's subtly done.
"...the truth remains like butcher's ware, hanging, dying there." - Brutal, honest, gets right in your face just like any truth should. I love the imagery of this line.
Well done. Thanks for the update. :)
5darknessbloomsI love the brutality of this piece - so physical but so much under the surface, the skin, at the same time. The last stanza has to be my favorite though - it's perfect almost.
"Flesh seems reasonably cheap for the loving I did not want..." - This line caught me and made me go back and reread,. It really stabs the reader with raw emotion, although it's subtly done.
"...the truth remains like butcher's ware, hanging, dying there." - Brutal, honest, gets right in your face just like any truth should. I love the imagery of this line.
Well done. Thanks for the update. :)