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10/30/2012 c1 livingspiritz1
Halo/walking on sunshine mash up momento!
4/2/2007 c1 12lxpetrik
You have a slow meandering way with words. Although, sometimes it's a little too complicated. A line or two that you have to re-read is no problem, but six? Try to simplify a bit. Simplicity can build a scene just as effectively as long compliacated sentances.
4/2/2007 c1 17DOORphrame
Thank you.

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