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4/2/2007 c1 1TalesOfOld
Wow, great start! You really pulled me in! Hmm, so it really wasn't a dream? I can't wait to see what happens next!

As far as critique goes...wow, you've come off clean! There's one little typo that I noticed, "He move quickly moved to crush his lips against mine." but otherwise, it's great.

Please update soon and keep writing!

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