for The Duel4/2/2007 c1 
12lxpetrik
Yank out the last three lines. It leaves you with a weak ending. Otherwise, very good strong words. You paint the picture with vivid detail. It's also a differnt sort of poem. Not that love poems are bad (shit, I'm the queen of love/angst poems), it's just refreshing to read something else for a change.
12lxpetrikYank out the last three lines. It leaves you with a weak ending. Otherwise, very good strong words. You paint the picture with vivid detail. It's also a differnt sort of poem. Not that love poems are bad (shit, I'm the queen of love/angst poems), it's just refreshing to read something else for a change.