for Solstice11/11/2008 c2 I like shakespear
LOVE!
LOVE!
6/17/2008 c1 annabellina
I love this! It;s cute and funny and interesting and I'm totally favorite-ing it... post more soon!
I love this! It;s cute and funny and interesting and I'm totally favorite-ing it... post more soon!
4/20/2008 c3 
16One-Hand Clap
Again, my complain is the same: too short! Also, 'Touche' should have one of those fancy little French flicks over the 'e'. That's just me, being annoying, though.
The character development, and the dialogue, between Donnie and Lucy is just... Darling, isn't it? Haha, I can't believe I used darling as an adjective. Time to retire! But yes, it truly is just... adorable!
- ClapTrap, from review marathon [check profile for link]
16One-Hand ClapAgain, my complain is the same: too short! Also, 'Touche' should have one of those fancy little French flicks over the 'e'. That's just me, being annoying, though.
The character development, and the dialogue, between Donnie and Lucy is just... Darling, isn't it? Haha, I can't believe I used darling as an adjective. Time to retire! But yes, it truly is just... adorable!
- ClapTrap, from review marathon [check profile for link]
4/20/2008 c2 One-Hand Clap
"Leaves scraped against the window of my sister's car. Her hands were set rigidly on the steering wheel, knuckles white, not used to country terrain nor to the closeness of trees to the winding road."
What imagery! And only two sentences in, I was there in the car with the protagonist, watching them bicker angrily at one another. I could imagine the protagonist's sister fully, even though nearly no description was used for her. Well done and Kudos!
One complaint: this chapter is dreadfully short, and I fear too much happens too fast! I'd remedy that by going into more detail of the protagonist's surroundings, and maybe adding in a few more 'settling in' scenes to further the character's... character.
"Leaves scraped against the window of my sister's car. Her hands were set rigidly on the steering wheel, knuckles white, not used to country terrain nor to the closeness of trees to the winding road."
What imagery! And only two sentences in, I was there in the car with the protagonist, watching them bicker angrily at one another. I could imagine the protagonist's sister fully, even though nearly no description was used for her. Well done and Kudos!
One complaint: this chapter is dreadfully short, and I fear too much happens too fast! I'd remedy that by going into more detail of the protagonist's surroundings, and maybe adding in a few more 'settling in' scenes to further the character's... character.
4/20/2008 c1 One-Hand Clap
This is an amazing start, and the protagonist, the way she narrates, just makes her so damn likeable! She's so sweet! So well done on that.
I'm also very interested in the plot that is emerging, so Kudos on that!
This is an amazing start, and the protagonist, the way she narrates, just makes her so damn likeable! She's so sweet! So well done on that.
I'm also very interested in the plot that is emerging, so Kudos on that!
1/23/2008 c3 Rayka-Sannada
This is really good, I like two of your stories. I can tell your a really good story writer. I hope you update this soon.
This is really good, I like two of your stories. I can tell your a really good story writer. I hope you update this soon.
7/15/2007 c3 6VisualKeiXx
I'm glad you updated.
I like Frankie so far. Her and Lucy are alike.
Update soon.
6VisualKeiXxI'm glad you updated.
I like Frankie so far. Her and Lucy are alike.
Update soon.
4/19/2007 c2 32The Idiot Savant
Beautiful.
I find this story hilarious but the main character is weak-ish. I understand her mildness, but this is nothing like my favourite heroines.
32The Idiot SavantBeautiful.
I find this story hilarious but the main character is weak-ish. I understand her mildness, but this is nothing like my favourite heroines.
4/19/2007 c1 The Idiot Savant
Hey - just wanted to say, I'm amazed by your eloquence. Usually, everyone's so shitty about it. So, yeah, amazing.
Hey - just wanted to say, I'm amazed by your eloquence. Usually, everyone's so shitty about it. So, yeah, amazing.
4/5/2007 c2 16mex.chika
That was Aweseomes! i likes it, The first chapter was iono it was ok i read it and i had tons of info. I think you pretty much covered all of the basics and are on your way to be a very GREAT writer!
16mex.chikaThat was Aweseomes! i likes it, The first chapter was iono it was ok i read it and i had tons of info. I think you pretty much covered all of the basics and are on your way to be a very GREAT writer!
4/5/2007 c2 6VisualKeiXx
That was amusing, what Donnie said,"Are you a masochist?" lol. I'm very interested to see what happens next between Lucy and Donnie.
6VisualKeiXxThat was amusing, what Donnie said,"Are you a masochist?" lol. I'm very interested to see what happens next between Lucy and Donnie.
4/5/2007 c1 VisualKeiXx
Well, for a first chapter this really caught my attention and i can't wait for the next one!
Well, for a first chapter this really caught my attention and i can't wait for the next one!