4/28/2007 c1 1Marie Ellen
Wow, I really like this. The rhyme scheme makes it almost like a nursery rhyme in it's simplicity, which makes the "burned heart" and the storm and "whore" stand out strikingly.

I don't think I really *got* this poem though. I think it has a lot of potential, and that it flows really well and is going somewhere until about "to notify the entire state" on down. I'm not sure what significance the "whore" has on the poem, nor do I think the anger the word "whore" casts over the poem is really justified by the poem itself.

Otherwise, if this is a work in progress as you said, keep working on it! There's definitely something great here.

Thanks for the review!