for The Lies Your Mother Never Got To Tell4/8/2007 c4 Comicfreak2007
Didn't call Len darling, huh?
Suspicious!
Like I said, make ur chapters longer, please. Other than that, good job on this chapter!
Didn't call Len darling, huh?
Suspicious!
Like I said, make ur chapters longer, please. Other than that, good job on this chapter!
4/8/2007 c3 Comicfreak2007
make your chapters longer, please.
I think I know why she's washing the dishes on her own and not let the dishwater do it! I do! i do! ido! *Reads Chapter four*
make your chapters longer, please.
I think I know why she's washing the dishes on her own and not let the dishwater do it! I do! i do! ido! *Reads Chapter four*
4/8/2007 c2 Comicfreak2007
Well, this is a shocker! I thought a girl that was rich will be like a blonde...totally clueless (No offence, blondes!).
But she's intelligent. I'm impressed. I can't wait for more! *Reads Chapter three*
Well, this is a shocker! I thought a girl that was rich will be like a blonde...totally clueless (No offence, blondes!).
But she's intelligent. I'm impressed. I can't wait for more! *Reads Chapter three*
4/8/2007 c1 Comicfreak2007
This story is good so far, and you're great with the detail, so keep it up.
Before I read chapter 2, I wanna ask you something. Will you read my first story, "The Adventures of Lenny and his Gang"? It's my first non-fic story on this site.
Just to let you know, I've been a member on fanfiction and Storywrite, and my writing has improved, so don't expect to see this chapter of my story to be 300 words or less...because this chapter has 1741 words. As you can tell, I have the details down pat.
I wanna know what u think! Anyway, back to the story. TO CH. 2!
This story is good so far, and you're great with the detail, so keep it up.
Before I read chapter 2, I wanna ask you something. Will you read my first story, "The Adventures of Lenny and his Gang"? It's my first non-fic story on this site.
Just to let you know, I've been a member on fanfiction and Storywrite, and my writing has improved, so don't expect to see this chapter of my story to be 300 words or less...because this chapter has 1741 words. As you can tell, I have the details down pat.
I wanna know what u think! Anyway, back to the story. TO CH. 2!
4/7/2007 c2 Jasper Riddle
Hm. Interesting, thus far. I guess. Personally, I don't find it very interesting yet, but it was short enough that I was obligated to read and review.
Well, okay, Seb seems interesting.
Hm. Interesting, thus far. I guess. Personally, I don't find it very interesting yet, but it was short enough that I was obligated to read and review.
Well, okay, Seb seems interesting.
4/7/2007 c1 kitedragon
That wasn't much of an exposition. There's no description of the main character other than her love for digital gadgets.
And by courser, I believe that you mean "cursor."
That wasn't much of an exposition. There's no description of the main character other than her love for digital gadgets.
And by courser, I believe that you mean "cursor."