for Dying12/24/2011 c1 Reader
I like it.
It kept me interested from beginning to end. (With other stories, I'd lose interest by the third sentence. You're better than those other people.)
There are a couple things to fix.
I'd give it A-/B+.
I like it.
It kept me interested from beginning to end. (With other stories, I'd lose interest by the third sentence. You're better than those other people.)
There are a couple things to fix.
I'd give it A-/B+.
4/9/2007 c1 
1xx 3DD Fan
Aww that's sad. For improvement, you should try not to have so many breaks and parenthesis; it just didn't seem to flow. Also, you didn't seem to have a point to the essay because it just kind of ended. Otherwise, good job!
1xx 3DD FanAww that's sad. For improvement, you should try not to have so many breaks and parenthesis; it just didn't seem to flow. Also, you didn't seem to have a point to the essay because it just kind of ended. Otherwise, good job!
4/9/2007 c1 2Ark Void
poorly written essay in my uneducated opinion.
The organization is poor, and the over use of () shows a lack of articulation.
Also for a titled essay, it's very informal. And What does this have to do with Sociology?
The only good thing I have to say is that you have much to improve. And you will get better.
2Ark Voidpoorly written essay in my uneducated opinion.
The organization is poor, and the over use of () shows a lack of articulation.
Also for a titled essay, it's very informal. And What does this have to do with Sociology?
The only good thing I have to say is that you have much to improve. And you will get better.