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12/24/2011 c1 Reader
I like it.

It kept me interested from beginning to end. (With other stories, I'd lose interest by the third sentence. You're better than those other people.)

There are a couple things to fix.

I'd give it A-/B+.
4/9/2007 c1 1xx 3DD Fan
Aww that's sad. For improvement, you should try not to have so many breaks and parenthesis; it just didn't seem to flow. Also, you didn't seem to have a point to the essay because it just kind of ended. Otherwise, good job!
4/9/2007 c1 2Ark Void
poorly written essay in my uneducated opinion.

The organization is poor, and the over use of () shows a lack of articulation.

Also for a titled essay, it's very informal. And What does this have to do with Sociology?

The only good thing I have to say is that you have much to improve. And you will get better.

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