for She's a what?4/13/2007 c4 rockangel18
This is really good! You need to write more. This particular story is addictive, but hard to follow.
This is really good! You need to write more. This particular story is addictive, but hard to follow.
4/11/2007 c1 
16Long Island Iced Tea
First of all correct your summary. Instead of:-
A young boy meets the new girl at school.He instantly likes her.But shes got tons of secret and knows things he didnt even know were real!Jaydelle is getting annoyed by this guy she doesnt know,but she cant help but to like him.major secrets come out!
It should be:-
A young boy meets the new girl at school. He instantly likes her. But she's got tons of secrets and knows things he didn't even know were real! Jaydelle is getting annoyed by this guy she doesnt know, but she can't help like him. Major secrets come out!
16Long Island Iced TeaFirst of all correct your summary. Instead of:-
A young boy meets the new girl at school.He instantly likes her.But shes got tons of secret and knows things he didnt even know were real!Jaydelle is getting annoyed by this guy she doesnt know,but she cant help but to like him.major secrets come out!
It should be:-
A young boy meets the new girl at school. He instantly likes her. But she's got tons of secrets and knows things he didn't even know were real! Jaydelle is getting annoyed by this guy she doesnt know, but she can't help like him. Major secrets come out!
4/10/2007 c1 5Millie Dee
It looks like a really good plot, but you forgot some commas. And when Miss Vera says: "You can have a seat in one of the chairs in front of my bed", where did she get a bed in her office?
5Millie DeeIt looks like a really good plot, but you forgot some commas. And when Miss Vera says: "You can have a seat in one of the chairs in front of my bed", where did she get a bed in her office?