for Y In The Lines4/15/2007 c1 
65Nemonus
The situation, whatever happened, feels real. You have some grammar troubles: "Were waiting" should be 'we're' I think; all "Its" in the fifth and third-to-last line should be 'it's'; "andnd" is an obvious typo; "love struck" needs a dash. Not bad.
65NemonusThe situation, whatever happened, feels real. You have some grammar troubles: "Were waiting" should be 'we're' I think; all "Its" in the fifth and third-to-last line should be 'it's'; "andnd" is an obvious typo; "love struck" needs a dash. Not bad.
4/14/2007 c1 879Moondog Dozier
Emotion filled and poignant, this really captures the connection well. I like the lack of specific detail, names, places, etc.., it really forces the reader to interpret the actual situation more closely. Very well written.
879Moondog DozierEmotion filled and poignant, this really captures the connection well. I like the lack of specific detail, names, places, etc.., it really forces the reader to interpret the actual situation more closely. Very well written.
4/14/2007 c1 11PocoSnow15
Wow, that was so awesome! I loved the ending, it's so true for a lot of people. Very well done, I loved your emotion!
11PocoSnow15Wow, that was so awesome! I loved the ending, it's so true for a lot of people. Very well done, I loved your emotion!