for Life, Liberty, and the Pursuit of Happiness5/6/2007 c2 
14FreakierThanThou
Cute. I like Kendra, she's funny, and the coach was cool. Deonte's great. I love their fighting, it's not melodramatic hate-turned-love or anything, just funny.
Three corrections: In the first chapter, her 'food' hits a basketball and you're missing a period after talking about her brother and rolling her eyes. In the second, Kendra tells the coach "your ancient" but should say "You're".
Other than that, great.
Keep writing,
-Freaky
14FreakierThanThouCute. I like Kendra, she's funny, and the coach was cool. Deonte's great. I love their fighting, it's not melodramatic hate-turned-love or anything, just funny.
Three corrections: In the first chapter, her 'food' hits a basketball and you're missing a period after talking about her brother and rolling her eyes. In the second, Kendra tells the coach "your ancient" but should say "You're".
Other than that, great.
Keep writing,
-Freaky
4/17/2007 c1 15Pinnacle of Pan
This is some awesome writing. When you Changed the name from Kendra to Kennie was that another nickname? Also, just a random fact that makes me like your story even more: My names Kendra! (Her names way cooler but the nicknames the same, so)
15Pinnacle of PanThis is some awesome writing. When you Changed the name from Kendra to Kennie was that another nickname? Also, just a random fact that makes me like your story even more: My names Kendra! (Her names way cooler but the nicknames the same, so)