12/17/2011 c20 i-wish-i-had-wings
yes! i love it when the couple breaks up! i love how strong integrity the main character has to actually do it and stick to it! i must admit i was waiting for tyler to f*ck upp :/ alex, or xander xD deserves much better, though it was a horrid thing to do, slipping tyler a date-rape drug..
i'm not really good at writing my thoughts down, but i loved reading it and i will definetly check the sequel out, i just hope they don't get back together =p
yes! i love it when the couple breaks up! i love how strong integrity the main character has to actually do it and stick to it! i must admit i was waiting for tyler to f*ck upp :/ alex, or xander xD deserves much better, though it was a horrid thing to do, slipping tyler a date-rape drug..
i'm not really good at writing my thoughts down, but i loved reading it and i will definetly check the sequel out, i just hope they don't get back together =p
12/15/2011 c12 5Lykan
I've read a few romances lately. The beginning of this one, as well as a few points in the middle, (namely, the parts where they were fighting) had me wondering exactly what you planned for the two of them.
You'll have to pardon my skepticism at their happiness in this chapter, but you can be sure I'll keep reading. The more angsty a romance is, the more I like it.
Let's see, critique . . . well, there are a few spelling and grammar errors, though the grammar is forgiven. Be sure to check through your chapters before you post. Some of the words were actually spelled correctly, but in the wrong places. For instance, putting "my" where it should have been "me". And that's all the critique I have for you.
Keep it up, I'll check out a few of your other stories as well, if they look like something I'd enjoy.
Keep writing!
~Lykan~
I've read a few romances lately. The beginning of this one, as well as a few points in the middle, (namely, the parts where they were fighting) had me wondering exactly what you planned for the two of them.
You'll have to pardon my skepticism at their happiness in this chapter, but you can be sure I'll keep reading. The more angsty a romance is, the more I like it.
Let's see, critique . . . well, there are a few spelling and grammar errors, though the grammar is forgiven. Be sure to check through your chapters before you post. Some of the words were actually spelled correctly, but in the wrong places. For instance, putting "my" where it should have been "me". And that's all the critique I have for you.
Keep it up, I'll check out a few of your other stories as well, if they look like something I'd enjoy.
Keep writing!
~Lykan~
11/15/2011 c20 obsessedwiththis
Aww, this was really, really amazing. I'm in love with this story. It was semi-bittersweet, in a way, but it was also good, because I could tell that Xander (previously Alex), will most probably end up with Aaron.
But...you know...*hint* *hint*
...We'll never know for sure without a...
SEQUEL!
Please? On my knees, begging PLEAASEE! :)
But honest. Great story and writing! :D
Aww, this was really, really amazing. I'm in love with this story. It was semi-bittersweet, in a way, but it was also good, because I could tell that Xander (previously Alex), will most probably end up with Aaron.
But...you know...*hint* *hint*
...We'll never know for sure without a...
SEQUEL!
Please? On my knees, begging PLEAASEE! :)
But honest. Great story and writing! :D
11/7/2011 c20 3ColorMeOrange
I think that this is the first story to go up on my favorites list here on Fictionpress. I'm not sure at the moment, but yeah. The plot was kind of a put off at first, no offense, but I've seen it a lot. You, however, took the plot and did amazing things with it. I love this story!
I think that this is the first story to go up on my favorites list here on Fictionpress. I'm not sure at the moment, but yeah. The plot was kind of a put off at first, no offense, but I've seen it a lot. You, however, took the plot and did amazing things with it. I love this story!
10/15/2011 c20 7A-Crimson-Memory
So I tried. I really tried to keep the tears out of my eyes but this chapter just totally kept them. And they spilled. They didn't stop running until the chapter was over. I already know Alex or in his case now 'Xander' is going to end up with Aaron and I already wish that Alex would take back Tyler. It wasn't even his fault. He deserves another chance but now that he's with Aaron he's gonna stay with Aaron because he doesn't want to be a crusher. I give you kudos though. This story was more real than anything I've read. I felt, hears, saw everything and it reminded me off my life. Reality doesn't have happy endings.
So I tried. I really tried to keep the tears out of my eyes but this chapter just totally kept them. And they spilled. They didn't stop running until the chapter was over. I already know Alex or in his case now 'Xander' is going to end up with Aaron and I already wish that Alex would take back Tyler. It wasn't even his fault. He deserves another chance but now that he's with Aaron he's gonna stay with Aaron because he doesn't want to be a crusher. I give you kudos though. This story was more real than anything I've read. I felt, hears, saw everything and it reminded me off my life. Reality doesn't have happy endings.
10/14/2011 c19 A-Crimson-Memory
Omg that was deep. Like really deep. "This is the last time." reality isn't a fairy tale and Alex is right for calling it off for good. I tried so hard not to get attached to this couple because I knew Tyler was too good to be true. He doesn't care for others feelings and he really set up Alex for heartbreak. Those 3 words that are supposed to be bond the couple together were just 3 words. ILY meant nothing to Tyler. Alex gave his heart and soul to that boy and he stuck a jagged knife into the now vacant hold that held his heart and twisted. Alex will forever hold that memory.
Omg that was deep. Like really deep. "This is the last time." reality isn't a fairy tale and Alex is right for calling it off for good. I tried so hard not to get attached to this couple because I knew Tyler was too good to be true. He doesn't care for others feelings and he really set up Alex for heartbreak. Those 3 words that are supposed to be bond the couple together were just 3 words. ILY meant nothing to Tyler. Alex gave his heart and soul to that boy and he stuck a jagged knife into the now vacant hold that held his heart and twisted. Alex will forever hold that memory.
10/14/2011 c4 A-Crimson-Memory
Well I thought this story wasnt gonna be interesting until the end of chapter 1. It takes a lot for me to get into a story and yours immediately pulled me in! However your story is relatively close to mine (the character descriptions) except the plot. My character are Evan and Xander so when I saw Xander i was like oh hell this is gonna be like mine. But then as I read on it's different and I'm enjoying it. :) it's a realistic teen story and those are my favorite
Well I thought this story wasnt gonna be interesting until the end of chapter 1. It takes a lot for me to get into a story and yours immediately pulled me in! However your story is relatively close to mine (the character descriptions) except the plot. My character are Evan and Xander so when I saw Xander i was like oh hell this is gonna be like mine. But then as I read on it's different and I'm enjoying it. :) it's a realistic teen story and those are my favorite
10/9/2011 c20 HugsKisses
I loved your ending. I think what makes it so good is how it isn't a happy ever after. It shows how fucked up life and relationships can actually get. Anyway, I like endings like this better than fairytale shit.. I havn't read the sequel yet (obviously) but perhaps 'Xander' will finally find his prince charming ;) I guess everyone deserves one eventually. If I had an account consider yourself favorited. But I don't.
I loved your ending. I think what makes it so good is how it isn't a happy ever after. It shows how fucked up life and relationships can actually get. Anyway, I like endings like this better than fairytale shit.. I havn't read the sequel yet (obviously) but perhaps 'Xander' will finally find his prince charming ;) I guess everyone deserves one eventually. If I had an account consider yourself favorited. But I don't.
9/19/2011 c20 Guest
Ummmm no. He should've ended up with Tyler, and I am SO glad I read the ending first, because I definitely would've fallen in love with this story.
Ummmm no. He should've ended up with Tyler, and I am SO glad I read the ending first, because I definitely would've fallen in love with this story.
7/16/2011 c20 kyocat4
o god, that is such a depressing ending. i loved this story, but god... man i want to cry so much but i think im still in shock abouth the ending. damn that is so sad.
This was a wonderful story though, great wrinting keep it up!
o god, that is such a depressing ending. i loved this story, but god... man i want to cry so much but i think im still in shock abouth the ending. damn that is so sad.
This was a wonderful story though, great wrinting keep it up!
5/26/2011 c20 1Eclipse Valentine
Okay I have a lot to say. This story is amazing! Although it was cliche it was realistic. I can imagine this happening in real life but guys like Alex for that matter would have broken up with ass long before he cheats. I mean how many times does he got to get slapped before he snapped?
Anyway I'm going to read your sequel.
Eclipse
Okay I have a lot to say. This story is amazing! Although it was cliche it was realistic. I can imagine this happening in real life but guys like Alex for that matter would have broken up with ass long before he cheats. I mean how many times does he got to get slapped before he snapped?
Anyway I'm going to read your sequel.
Eclipse
5/13/2011 c20 shyd1
Woah. First I have to say that this was HOT! Also, addicting. I couldn't stop reading it! What a mishmash of drama! I was waiting in suspense for the end (and I'm so glad there is a sequel!).
Great story!
Woah. First I have to say that this was HOT! Also, addicting. I couldn't stop reading it! What a mishmash of drama! I was waiting in suspense for the end (and I'm so glad there is a sequel!).
Great story!
3/27/2011 c20 2YamiTenshiKoi
O_O This story has turned me into a sobbing, pathetic, mess:( I wanted to kill Tyler for braking Alex's heart so much... and Chris just got on my bad list as well. At an rate, I'm off to read the sequel, I loved this story(: Nice job.
XOXO
Lexi
O_O This story has turned me into a sobbing, pathetic, mess:( I wanted to kill Tyler for braking Alex's heart so much... and Chris just got on my bad list as well. At an rate, I'm off to read the sequel, I loved this story(: Nice job.
XOXO
Lexi