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8/25/2009 c1 1CinderellaWithCombatBoots
I really like it. Please, please update soon. I want more! *Does sad little puppy eyes*. Haha.
7/29/2009 c1 4the Italian
I thought this was very professionally written. It's the sort of thing I'd more expect to be reading in paperback form, really. The actual story was great too, and quite a bit different for me; most of the stories I think of are about lonely hearts. Great, overall.
7/13/2009 c1 17mousegirl05
So, what to say that hasn’t already been said? Aw never mind. I never mind repeats. ^_^

So the writing itself was amazing. Very technically correct (which adds a lot to writing without even being noticeable—and is hella-hard to do!). The flow was amazing and for once a story riddled with flashbacks didn’t seem disjointed or rough or misplaced. Everything worked well. You played up the awkward tension between Ty and Darrin as they made their escape very well. The dialogue between Matt and Ty was also, in a way, beautiful. I really, really enjoyed that. It made it that much harder/hurtful to accept that Matt had betrayed Ty and his dad like that (not that I can’t understand—he must have been really hurt too—poor Matt, the jerk). Still, it set up the desire that someday there would be restoration between them all.

The scene when they were getting dressed to leave after the night in the hotel was amazing. It was both sweet and hot all at the same time. *grins* I’m a sucker for a nice [red] tie too, so I so know where Ty was coming from.

Nicely done. Yeah, really nicely done.
5/25/2009 c1 2Sunny Side Down
That was just fantastic, I have to say. This just made my day brighter, thank you.

4/21/2009 c1 Leon Trotsky
That was gorgeous. Just plain gorgeous.
1/14/2009 c1 Untitled Absence
Classic.
11/20/2008 c1 27Trinity4
Teletha from the Khaos forums here! I really loved this story.

The characters are certainly believable. I like how we got to read from all of the character's voices from time to time.

I remember the Mr. Yuck face! That conversation was great. You do a lovely job with realistic dialogue.

What's best though is the maturity of the theme. The story definitely has depth and I can really see it happening. The awkwardness between Ty and Darrin, the uncertainty of their future, them sleeping together their first night away, those were so real, and touching. David's reaction to finding out about their relationship was definitely understandable though regrettable. And the ending, though sappy... was so appropriate.

I'm rambling... but this was a great story and I'm looking forward to reading more when I have the time!
8/31/2008 c1 Tinyyellowboxes
AW! I like this story. It's very real, with real situations and i can appreciate that. Also the characters are really cute and well developed. I'm a fan.
8/1/2008 c1 2WrittenSound
AW! That was SO COOT! I understand David's reaction to it all, I mean... Ur best friend and ur DAD? That would totally suck! But they love each other, and it's so FRIGGEN CUTE!
7/24/2008 c1 1Broken Wrist
I loved it, I absolutey loved it. These are the best type of stories.
7/15/2008 c1 cherubicka
I haven't read much shota. I don't hate it but I don't like it either.

I didn't really feel for Ty and Darrin. I get the "wrongness" and "rightness" of their situation. But there is something really hollow about the whole thing...they claim to love each other for each other and yet around every paragraph the "age difference" dilemma is being underlined. So much that I started looking for it through out the rest of the story.

I get the reality; what they're doing IS risky, but for two people IN LOVE it should have been the most natural feeling in the world. There's a difference between understanding your circumstances and letting it direct your love life: - was this man his lover, his stand-in father, or his sugar-daddy... -NONONO Ty stop thinking about stuff you're supposed to NOT care about-

Maybe everyone's bitching made them extra aware of what they were doing? Maybe that was your intention and it just didn't register? I don't know. It frustrated me.

On the other hand...I really really really enjoyed your characterization of David. Despite the lovers, to me he's what really grounds this story. A minor role bearing a major job. I LOVE IT. He's the best friend who encourages the union in the beginning and the one who tries to tear it all down at the end. Perfect. Up and down. Start and finish. Like life. He's that kind of character. Unlike Ty and Darrin who move through the story knowing who they are and that they want each other, (that gives them direction, somewhere to GO) David is weaker because he seems less sure, he fails to understand their relationship in the end, he loses himself and does some terrible things for it...because he's human. It doesn't matter how brave the protagonists are, the most flawed characters are the most real and I love them.



It's nostalgic too, because David is reminiscent of every guy friend that's ever been close to me growing up. Whenever he shows up in the story I instantly GET what he's all about no matter how little he says and does. I understand him.

And I know this is a story about Ty and Darrin who overcome a probably very serious problem...but even by the time it ended I was STILL waving the DAVIDxTY flag.
6/30/2008 c1 Saint-Weasel
Talk about unconditional. I'm still trying to look through the story, but I'm pretty sure I'm not succeeding.

Ok but, I totally get your style now.

I figure it's Milk. Don't ask.

It just feels like it, liquidy, creamy

and only really effective with something else. (like, i can't drink milk alone)

That's my only advice is that you should put more into this story (more of something sharp, perhaps, like fish bone, or a thumb tack, what am i even saying) so that there's this tension, this sandpaper effect. What I mean is, it IS romance, so it being milk is perfectly fine. But I'm not your average reading soft romances type, not even soft music. I like things hard, vulgar, comedic...

But me, I'm an audience you probably don't get, so keep it up. (:

Meh, If you read anything I write, I wonder what you'd think of it...

I'm a bad reviewer, lol.
5/30/2008 c1 7endless void
This is really good piece of writing. That's all I can really say right now. :faves:
5/28/2008 c1 GlassoWater
Loved this one too! It was a bit awkward with a grown man + teenager, but you pulled it off rather well. =D Keep up the great work!
5/27/2008 c1 Nova laVie
that was sweet, i like what you did with the storm.
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