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4/27/2007 c1 20purplepants
a little ambigous, as it only portrays an idea. i think it would have been better if you noted a specific time where you thought about this, or told someone this and just added some powerful descriptions. nice, keep writing.
4/27/2007 c1 12364 unbirthdays
i really really really like this. it's inspiring. your choices of words are quite spectacular if i must say. it had a rhythm going on for the first three stanzas, but in the last one it was sort of lost. i think if you re-arrange the words in the last stanza it would flow a little bit better, but i definitely wouldn't change them.

this is genius :) xox

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