for Tell Me Why11/21/2003 c1 
67Unsubsuper
dont know what everyone thought was so confusing. like the progression of feelings, but i think you maybe could have put in another stanza before the last one because the change there is really sudden. overall, really good.
67Unsubsuperdont know what everyone thought was so confusing. like the progression of feelings, but i think you maybe could have put in another stanza before the last one because the change there is really sudden. overall, really good.
10/25/2001 c1 StriderHunter
I'm not an expert on poetry or anything-in fact, I don't know anything about it-but there was no problem understanding what you were trying to convey here, Sweet. You seem to be a provocative poet, as evident in this poem and in your others. Remember, if poetry confuses people, then it's a sign of being a profound piece of work! ;)
I'm not an expert on poetry or anything-in fact, I don't know anything about it-but there was no problem understanding what you were trying to convey here, Sweet. You seem to be a provocative poet, as evident in this poem and in your others. Remember, if poetry confuses people, then it's a sign of being a profound piece of work! ;)
6/2/2001 c1 Mello
I don't find this confusing at all. You captured the rampant and wild thoughts one has listening to two voics in their heads: the voice of the soul's desire and the voice of the ego-self's fears.
I don't find this confusing at all. You captured the rampant and wild thoughts one has listening to two voics in their heads: the voice of the soul's desire and the voice of the ego-self's fears.
6/2/2001 c1 1Tantricide
I think some people may be confused because it is a poem, about love, that expresses a lot of fear.
But there is a lot to fear about Love. The pitfalls are manifold, replete with traps and snares.
A wonderful poem. :)
1TantricideI think some people may be confused because it is a poem, about love, that expresses a lot of fear.
But there is a lot to fear about Love. The pitfalls are manifold, replete with traps and snares.
A wonderful poem. :)
3/27/2001 c1 41Willum
I, for one, found it very, very good, SweetEvil. Hard to understand? I don't believe so. I would think that a lot of people could relate to this, to that one person that we love but is afraid to love us back. Or, maybe, that's something that only a few of us ever truely experiance. No matter, I thought it wonderful, and very well done.
41WillumI, for one, found it very, very good, SweetEvil. Hard to understand? I don't believe so. I would think that a lot of people could relate to this, to that one person that we love but is afraid to love us back. Or, maybe, that's something that only a few of us ever truely experiance. No matter, I thought it wonderful, and very well done.
3/25/2001 c1 Tseng
I understood it. It was about someone who loved you but you were afraid to love them back. I totally understand, love can be a scary thing until you both agree on it... a while back I told my girlfriend that I loved her, but I almost didn't... I nearly crie trying to tell her because it meant so much. But once you say it, and they say it back ther's no feeling in the world like it. :)
I understood it. It was about someone who loved you but you were afraid to love them back. I totally understand, love can be a scary thing until you both agree on it... a while back I told my girlfriend that I loved her, but I almost didn't... I nearly crie trying to tell her because it meant so much. But once you say it, and they say it back ther's no feeling in the world like it. :)
3/22/2001 c1 38Erika Lynn
I loved it. Anyone who said they didnt get it is just ignorant and blind to talent. (but that's their loss. Your words are of universal understanding. Thank you for sharing.
38Erika LynnI loved it. Anyone who said they didnt get it is just ignorant and blind to talent. (but that's their loss. Your words are of universal understanding. Thank you for sharing.
3/22/2001 c1 16silversilence
I know! I hate that they took away the hit feature!*whines incesantly* anyway...Unless i'm totally off base I thought it was very clear as to what you were saying. I wish I could have the problem of running into a love I didnt understand as compared to running away from nothing at all...
16silversilenceI know! I hate that they took away the hit feature!*whines incesantly* anyway...Unless i'm totally off base I thought it was very clear as to what you were saying. I wish I could have the problem of running into a love I didnt understand as compared to running away from nothing at all...
3/22/2001 c1 poetrysdeadremarks
I think you did a heck of a job. It has great form and a great meaning (confusion of what you fear and what you adore). In this case a human being.
I think you did a heck of a job. It has great form and a great meaning (confusion of what you fear and what you adore). In this case a human being.