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7/14/2007 c2 3BlueCrystal
This chapter was really interesting. My favorite part was with the old air elemental, and her family member. That was really interesting. Umm. So I saw one or two simple errors here, "Assona, the elementa of water," and "nowhere" is one word. Also, the word "whorlpool" is spelled with an H. This was good.
7/14/2007 c1 BlueCrystal
This beginning was good. I just wish that instead of describing what hair color and eye color the elementals had, you had described each of the people. I think it would have been a lot more interesting than it already was if you had flashed to perhaps each child inside of their Tribes, doing whatever it was they were doing. Other than that, I didn't see any simple typo errors, so, good job!
5/4/2007 c1 28surrealphobia
Great prolouge and details I'm going to add this to my favs so I can keep track of when you update. I can't wait to see where this ends up.

Surreal

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