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12/3/2007 c1 163Frosted Midnight
interesting. i liked it!
7/9/2007 c1 23Viviaya
Yay! I love the fact theat when you use rhyme it was in the same line. It's kind of fun, and I know that feeling. Were you mad when you wrote this, or was someone angry with you?
5/21/2007 c1 27Julie Poe
I like it. It puts a vivid picture in the mind, somewhat like what a haiku. Good job!
5/9/2007 c1 87x.Insanely Serene.x
scary [[lol]] haha, it was exact... good job
5/9/2007 c1 59The Jynx of Kari
it stuttered to me. I'm a big prick about flo [at times] and the no comma after 'exploding orange sparks' kinda lost the rhythm i saw.

BUT On the positive side, i like the last line, kinda a contrast to the red descriptions i saw in the rest of the poem yet pertaining to the Fire Eyes. I like it!

_Kari

[BTW: here's a tidbit, I tend to visualize poems with colors, sounds, and smells and it kinda explains why I saw red b4 u mentioned red. lol]
5/7/2007 c1 1Gemma Lovell
Thanks for your review! Wow...this is really good. I love your contrast of the colors, the blue and the orange. Good job!

Gemma
5/5/2007 c1 306Ashelin
Sometimes people's eyes are the scarriest thing in the world. I have bad memories about some people glaring. *shivers* Great job, loved the last line. Intense.

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