for Paradise2/26/2008 c1 Orual
From the sixth line, this poem called "The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock" into my mind-those couplets are so very Eliot. Then, of course, when I got to "The mermaids sing for me, I hear their cry,/ I shall not walk upon the shore in morning. / I shall not savor dried fruits" I knew beyond all doubt that this is a sort of response to Prufrock. I love it. Your style flows along so nicely, and your metaphors and the characterizations are right on. It just leads the reader right along.
I think this would be a little easier to read single-spaced, though. In case you don't know, if you hold 'control' down while hitting enter, you can avoid the double-spacing.
Thank you so much for sharing this! (And I don't use exclamation points lightly.) I know I'll think of it the next time I read Prufrock. I really enjoyed it.
From the sixth line, this poem called "The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock" into my mind-those couplets are so very Eliot. Then, of course, when I got to "The mermaids sing for me, I hear their cry,/ I shall not walk upon the shore in morning. / I shall not savor dried fruits" I knew beyond all doubt that this is a sort of response to Prufrock. I love it. Your style flows along so nicely, and your metaphors and the characterizations are right on. It just leads the reader right along.
I think this would be a little easier to read single-spaced, though. In case you don't know, if you hold 'control' down while hitting enter, you can avoid the double-spacing.
Thank you so much for sharing this! (And I don't use exclamation points lightly.) I know I'll think of it the next time I read Prufrock. I really enjoyed it.
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