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7/7/2012 c1 50The Moon Howls At The Wolf
Great rhythm. The puncuation you used quickens the pace of the story until the very end, lik the thumping of a dieing heartbeat, struggling to live after the crash of adrenaline. Its rare (for me) to see a poem that rhymes without being tacky or nonsensical, so great job on mastering both!
Keep Writing!
6/29/2012 c1 Abbytjie
Your description skills are excellent. You manage to capture feelings so well.
4/4/2012 c1 84Nancy Mae
good job. Kinda sad, but really good. I liked it. Keep up the good work.

~KML92
5/16/2009 c1 6luckyblakcat
The last line really touched me. 1. Because I've been through the same thing, or close, and have felt the same way. 2. It's very well written. My suggestion is using my symbolism. It gives the reader something to thikn about not only while they're reading but after as well.

Great work,

blakcat
5/19/2007 c1 13Shasta Valentine
emotional, real, great. I'd like to know the story behind this one.

Shazz
5/10/2007 c1 A Once Dead Poet
This poem isn't bad, but it isn't extremely good either. I suppose for up-front style it is fairly good, but possibly try using more imagery in the future. That would make it more interesting to me.

Keep writing! :D
5/9/2007 c1 6laura pamela
o very nice, very emotional. real. i like real. I also like the unreal and the unkown, but this is ultra fantastic.

please review me, xx-laurasbirdie-xx
5/9/2007 c1 20SAKoi
It was the title that caught my eye, it's a good line. The rhyme scheme and rhythm was excellent without taking anything out of the emotion in the poem. Well done.

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