for The Phantom of Dark Hollow9/30/2007 c1 
57Xerophyte
I love this as a description of a band piece. I'm going to go try to find an mp3 of that now :D
You had a typo in the paragraph/stanza (since this piece is very musical and flowing) that starts with "As the horse picks up its pace, so do you..."
In the beginning, I was debating whether or not I liked this being told from a standpoint of the narrator telling the reader how he/she feels. But it really puts the reader inside the piece. Nicely done!
57XerophyteI love this as a description of a band piece. I'm going to go try to find an mp3 of that now :D
You had a typo in the paragraph/stanza (since this piece is very musical and flowing) that starts with "As the horse picks up its pace, so do you..."
In the beginning, I was debating whether or not I liked this being told from a standpoint of the narrator telling the reader how he/she feels. But it really puts the reader inside the piece. Nicely done!